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Comedy
Private Detective 3
By Paul&Mark
13 January 2006
Just one of a few different characters and scenarios we are playing with this sketch would be one of many focusing on the useless detective  - This is our first time doing this so would appreciate any feedback

 

DAY. AN UNTIDY AND SMOKY OFFICE

 

CLOSE UP OF PRIVATE DETECTIVE ON TELEPHONE

Playing away when you're on nights you say?

That's not a problem... £150 per day plus expenses.. Okay .. We'll talk soon....

 

CLOSE UP OF PHONE BEING PUT DOWN

 

NIGHT QUIET SUBURBAN RESIDENTIAL STREET

 

CLOSE UP OF DETECTIVE SAT IN HIS CAR DRINKING COFFEE WHILST WATCHING THE FRONT OF A HOUSE

 

DOWNSTAIRS LIGHT GOES OFF AND SECONDS LATER FRONT UPSTAIRS BEDROOM LIGHT GOES ON

 

CLOSE UP OF WOMAN IN SKIMPY CLOTHING CLOSING CURTAINS AND LAUGHING

 

DETECTIVE ATTEMPTS TO THROW COFFEE CUP OUT OF WINDOW BUT WINDOW CLOSED DETECTIVE THEN RUNS FROM CAR TOWARDS TREE OUTSIDE BEDROOM WINDOW CARRYING LOTS OF RECORDING EQUIPMENT AND CAMERAS DETECTIVE STANDS AT BOTTOM OF TREE LOOKING UP

 

CUT TO DAYTIME WITH MORNING BIRDS SINGING AND CLOSE UP OF DETECTIVE SLEEPING LIKE A BABY STUCK UP THE TREE

 

HEAR SOUND OF CURTAINS BEING OPENED

 

DETECTIVE OPENS EYES WIDE

 

CUT TO SIDE VIEW WHICH SHOWS DETECTIVE ABOUT 10 CMS FROM WINDOW PANE

 

CUT TO VIEW FROM INSIDE BEDROOM OVER WOMANS SHOULDER

 

CLOSE UP OF DETECTIVE THROUGH WINDOW

 

MOUTHING THE WORDS Oh Bollocks!

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Written by givitsum (651 comments posted) 16th February 2006
I think the idea is a good one, but maybe the sleuth could do something funnier once discovered. I think it's vintage Smith & Jones or Morecambe & Wise. Good one.

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