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By Katanga
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29 August 2008 |
Victor Meldrew on holiday . . .
Cheers!
John X
Clubbers
Here, wrenched from sleep's full-quiet cradling arms,
I hear the songs of drunken homebound clubbers,
who, raucous as a gang of car alarms,
insult the dawn with thongs, discarded rubbers.
I watch as two in turn proceed to puke
against the tree that grows outside my window.
Will nature offer them some stern rebuke?
Hungover heads perhaps - it's not a sin though.
I wish that we could capture youth again,
be young enough to dance till dawn, unfettered.
Cantankerous age makes me take up my pen
to rail against illiterate youth, unlettered.
It's not with the cicadas' rasping rattle,
but with the bloody clubbers I'll do battle.
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I like Written by Brett (1001 comments posted) 29th August 2008 | 'raucous as a gang of car alarms'! I also enjoyed the shift in reflection at the 9th (like all good sonnets should have) and a very good closing couplet. Nice one, Tolstoy. Cheers | Written by Josie (2847 comments posted) 29th August 2008 | | Now John - I thought you were on holiday, far away from the troubles of life - but what is this then? Not peace and quiet after all? Surely you didn't pack your computer? | Written by Phil (7001 comments posted) 29th August 2008 | Enjoyed, John. And not a little jealous that you've managed to get away. I'd happily tolerate the odd puke slick for a little sun. Enjoy what's left of your hols. Phil | Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 29th August 2008 | I like this, too, John. Fun, reflective, observative as well as personal. I really like the rhyme in this one. I need a holiday, too. Mia | Written by punchy (535 comments posted) 29th August 2008 | Where are you ,you lucky bastard? I like your poem " insult the dawn with thongs" funny, I wish we could capture youth again? of course you can, don't be an old fart just get out there and start pinging those thongs, you're never too old to have fun. x | Thanks Guys! Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 30th August 2008 | Many thanks to you Brett, Josie, Mia, Phil and Paula. This is my last evening in Kefalonia (Greek island) and I am in an internet cafe, about to post a couple of rudities . . . Well, it IS Saturday! Cheers! John X |
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