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Point of view from a tree (my first posted work here)
By XenaLin
30 August 2008

This is a short story about the point of view from a tree (just like the title says). Imagine yourself as a tree and go from there. 
This is my first work posted on here so I'd appreciate some constructive criticism :) Thank you.


I feel alone. I am alone. Noone is around, to be seen or even heard. I can feel the wind against me, feel it lingering in my hair, playing with it. Everyone else has died. Murdered or died of natural causes.
Sometimes it feels like I will die too, out of loneliness. So far noone has come to murder me. I am greatful but at the same time I’m devastated, because I am alone and I don’t know how much longer I can stand being alone.
When the wind is really strong, it feels like I’m gonna fall, and noone will be there to catch me or see me fall. I don’t know what I’ve been doing wrong or even if I have been doing something wrong.
I’ve been living here for over one hundred years, always together with company, in the beginning we were very small and green about everything. Every little wind made us shiver and almost fall down. We were tiny and thin back then.
The years flew by and we stood together through thick and thin. Most of us made it through storms, fires and even wars. But now ... now that company is gone. I wish I was gone as well. Noone will hear me scream. Noone is around for miles. Nothing but me, the grass and the wind, rain and sun.
I wonder what will happen now. What will happen to me. To this land. I’ve seen people come and build things, tear them down to start all over again. They never notice me. They know I’m there but they never take any notice of me, so I’m left on my own. They leave me be. They’ve murdered my brothers and sisters, those that were still alive, and now they ignore me. They could’ve just murdered me too. I feel no desire to go on living.
They say that the strongest tree in the forest stands alone, that is not true. At least not in my case since I am the last tree of this forest. I am the last of my kin.

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beautiful
Written by cheryl1984 (13 comments posted) 30th August 2008
hi xenalin. this is my first review on this site and i thought your piece was heartbreaking. I couldnt help but picture the tree as a lonely old lady?

Written by Emmuttmax (203 comments posted) 30th August 2008
Hi XenaLin, 
 
Nice effort. 
 
I don't care for the title, "Point of View from a Tree." I would change it to "Point of View of a Tree," although that still wouldn't do it for me.  
 
You write "Noone" when what you mean is no one. "Noone" would be pronounced as "noon." 
 
"So far no one has come to murder me" seems quite unnecessary because the tree is talking (or thinking) in first-person present. 
 
Although I share your environmental concerns, the piece seems a little simplistic. 
 
Peace, 
Mike
HI Xenalin
Written by jean.day (2387 comments posted) 31st August 2008
You made an interesting point - in trying to see things from the view of a tree. I can remember the view from the window of the first house we owned - and it was a single tree on top of a hill - and I thought it was so lovely - being there all alone - on the skyline. 
 
I like the idea of the wind playing with the tree's hair.

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