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Poetry
Confusion? (83`Q<}
By zee666
31 August 2008
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CoNfuSed yEt?

Consider a small room,

4 feet by 6 feet and ever so pretty.

It’s white walls and the clock in the shape of a clock on the east wall.


7:35and-a-half it says, it’s words like that of a caring mugger, little do you know that as you leave the sanctity of an idiot that you will be burned for the heresy of reading a religious text with only two fingers.

You are frowned upon by the crowd as your skin melts and you blood and fat boils, Gods (or God as some believe) sit(s), a confused look on their(his) faces(back space once).

Reviews

Written by Veronica_Milvus (768 comments posted) 31st August 2008
Still not poetry IMHO.
Confusion? No.
Written by Brett (1001 comments posted) 31st August 2008
This is not poor poetry (because it is not poetry) it is just poor writing. And it certainly isn't as clever as it hopes to be (no matter how many parenthesis). 
Cheers

Written by Phil (7001 comments posted) 31st August 2008
Sorry, zee - same review as last time. 
 
Phil

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