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Calderstones Park
By Bagheera
31 August 2008

  Frown   ♪♪ "I took my harp to McCarthy's party, but nobody asked me to play" ♪♪


A local poetry group organised an afternoon of music & poetry at a local park today.

There was far too much material for everyone to be included, and this little 'ditty' didn't get an airing, so I offer it for general consumption. Anyone familiar with Calderstones Park, Liverpool?

PS  Explanation, last line, last verse!
    
      Part of Calderstones is a separate garden (Hartshill) where the gardeners perform horticultural miracles to preserve endangered species and the like ..........


Calderstones

 

 

So often seen in morning mist, rain-ravaged, silent, secret:

Your bulk brooding, yet half hidden in the dark:

Placed to fulfil some long-forgotten function

Determined exactly

By clerics of a bygone era

 

Yet now you stand, hip and hap

Ripped from your calculated locations

Tossed, for modern men to ponder upon

No longer set in geometric pattern

But hunkered down, weathered, sandstone-brown

 

Beyond this "wooden O" there stands an oak

Ancient in lineage, venerable in years

Yet hale and strong: its fruits each year it bears

Acorns such as He Himself once was

When Magna Carta for this town was spoke

 

A further thought away, a wall beyond:

Calmly, koi carp sun themselves

Beneath the lily pads of a peaceful pond

Where else (you ask) can be found such contrast and diversity

If not here in Liverpool, Capital of Culture's latest city?

 

A secret garden, silently guarded you may find

Where blossoms rarely found elsewhere are nurtured; kind

Hands and kinder hearts protect them all

From worm and from disease, e'en winter's deathly chill

God bless the gardeners, both here – and at Hartshill!

                                                   

                                                            Paul McDermott August 2008

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

                                                                                 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Reviews
Nice
Written by zee666 (51 comments posted) 31st August 2008
Generally i liked this piece. it was very visual and the references to bygone days were useful and added alot, the small bits of old english worked well with 'old' feeling of the poem and it allround worked well. 
What was the big gap at the end for?

Written by Veronica_Milvus (768 comments posted) 31st August 2008
I liked this line: 
 
"But hunkered down, weathered, sandstone-brown"  
 
where the park itself is personified. 
 
and 
 
"A further thought away, a wall beyond:  
 
Calmly, koi carp sun themselves  
 
Beneath the lily pads of a peaceful pond" 
 
A nice portrait - sorry you didn't get the chance to declaim it to your fellow poets, glad you posted it here. 
 

Written by Phil (7001 comments posted) 31st August 2008
Shame you didn't get to perform this. It paints a pictue (and your fondness) for the place well. 
 
Phil

Written by Brett (1001 comments posted) 31st August 2008
Liked the nod to Will: 'wooden O'.  
Agree that it's a shame you did not get to air this piece. 
V has picked out my favourite lines - 'Calmly, koi carp...' 
 
Enjoyed. 
Cheers

Written by grace (173 comments posted) 1st September 2008
I enjoyed this very much indeed and believe you've given me and excellent 'sense' of the park. 
 
I also loved the lines already mentioned but for me, the last stanza is my favourite, just lovely. 
 
Thank you, Pamx 
 

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