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By Katanga
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01 September 2008 |
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fissuring the sky
a thunderclap cracks the dawn
detonates birdsong
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Written by grace (173 comments posted) 1st September 2008 | A wonderful Haiku.
"fissuring the sky" is a wonderfully original opening and
"detonates birdsong" is a classic ending.
Loved it, Pamx
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Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 1st September 2008 | Most dynamic haiku I've read.
Phil |
Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 1st September 2008 | This made me laugh, the 3rd line especialy made the whole thing so comical for me, as if you are really angry at being woken up!
Mia  | Dawn Haiku
Written by TimCharigan (4 comments posted) 8th September 2008 | I really liked this - especially 'detonates birdsong'
very dramatic and not a word wasted
more please! | Many thanks . . .
Written by Katanga (1515 comments posted) 8th September 2008 | . . . Pam, Phil, Mia and Tim!
It was a bit of a one-off - like a thunderclap.
I am so glad you like it!
Another?
Maybe, when my muse's lightning strikes . . .
Tim - I shall seek out your work . . .
Beers!
John X |
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