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The Last of Summer
By Veronica_Milvus
01 September 2008
Another ******* summer with almost no sunshine.

I don't know why I felt the need to write this one with such long drawn out lines, I guess I was thinking of some song lyrics: Sheryl Crow's "All I want to do is have some fun" and Leo Sayer's "Moonlighting".

THE LAST OF SUMMER

The first of September and the last of the English summer;

now the burgeoning blackberries droop on their brambles, heavily sweet,

and the birds mass on the humming lines like athletes gathered to race.

We wipe the dew from windscreens in the cobweb-heavy mornings.

 

Here ends a season dragged with clouds and lashed with soaking showers,

scant of picnicking and sunbathing and heatwaves spent on loungers.

Cheated of fetes and festivals, barbecues and beaches,

people pack away shorts and sandals in drawers and in high cupboards;

shove airbeds and gazebos into garages and garden sheds.

School uniforms are hemmed and pressed and laid out for the morning.

 

Faces turning inwards towards TV screens and sofas

consider prematurely the serious work of autumn.

The electric lights flick on in every living room and kitchen;

the evenings, like the shedding hay wagons, are intent on gathering in.

Reviews
Drawn out lines?
Written by Katanga (1515 comments posted) 1st September 2008
Maybe because the summer has been such drawn out misery? 
 
Anyway, I like the gentle mournfulness of this and all the details of people's predictable end-of summer acts and activities. 
 
Some great phrases and lines: 
 
'burgeoning blackberries' 
 
'a season dragged with clouds' 
 
'scant of picnicking' 
 
'Faces turning inwards towards TV screens and sofas' 
 
and many more. 
 
And your last line's a triumph, as is usually the case with your poems. 
 
Much enjoyed! 
 
Shivers! 
 
John

Written by grace (173 comments posted) 1st September 2008
Hi Veronica, 
 
what a wonderful poem, I enjoyed every single word. 
 
You have summed up this summer and the beginning of autumn perfectly and with such richness. I also particularly love your last line, it is indeed a triumph! 
 
Thank you for sharing, 
 
Pamx
Enjoyed this, V.
Written by Brett (987 comments posted) 1st September 2008
I like the lingering of the lines! 
The third line of the first stanza made me smile, and I loved 'the cobweb-heavy mornings.' 
 
As Pam has said, that last line is a belter! 
 
Good stuff as always. 
 
Cheers

Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 1st September 2008
'Cob web heavy mornings.' I have very strong memories from childhood of dew heavy webs on privet hedges - wonderful. 
 
I think the long, drawn out lines gave this a bit of a depressing feel - much like the bloody miserable weather we've had. Bad, even by Bolton standards. 
 
Good piece of writing, Veronica. Enjoyed it - which is more than I can say for the sodding summer. 
 
Phil

Written by Robru (272 comments posted) 2nd September 2008
I just love to read about other summers, summers that are different from our own here in the dry dusty inland of the land down under. 
I like your poetry, the metaphors, the reference to rain and the reference to evenings "intent on gathering in." 
Our seasons are, of course, opposite, today was a warm sunny spring day with no cloud at all and no winds. I spent the whole day outside pottering. 
My better half was born in England and remembers the summer you have written about. She is happy here. 
 
Cheers and best wishes for a pleasant autumn and winter. 
 
Bob

Written by Fledermaus (3490 comments posted) 2nd September 2008
I liked your poem. Funnily enough I do like the rain too though... Perhaps because I worked all summer ;) Nice poetry.

Written by Veronica_Milvus (751 comments posted) 2nd September 2008
Robru - I am so hacked off with this summer (the gloomiest August on record, in terms of cloud cover) thart I am coming to Oz for Christmas to cheer myself up. 
 
Thanks all for your reviews. I like doing these desciptive pieces, I might try some more.
Lucky you!
Written by Katanga (1515 comments posted) 2nd September 2008
Gosh! Oz for Xmas?! 
 
Let's have lots more of your 'hunky surfer' poems in / on your return. 
 
Oh Heaven! 
 
Tolstoy X

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