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A Cleave Poem
By Katanga
01 September 2008

A 'cleave' poem is a fascinating new form invented by 'footy' - please see the thread under 'Latest Discussions'.

The two halves are supposed to make independent sense, with 'opposed' meanings, while the whole thing put together also makes a complete poem. So, three in one.

Here is my clumsy first attempt.

Cheers!

John



Dancing Girls - A Cleave Poem

         And now bring on the dancing girls
        the girls who long lift their skirts
        to dance all night from dusk till dawn
        in pale moonlight but then are torn
            sleepless crying from empty dreams
             darkness dying or so it seems

Reviews
Admirable!
Written by Brett (987 comments posted) 1st September 2008
A success at a very intriguing and difficult form I would say. And very you, Tolstoy! Though I'm surpried yours wasn't a 'cleavage' poem. 
Cheers
wow
Written by footy (38 comments posted) 1st September 2008
I am impressed. 
Would you allow me to collect yours as the first 
to put on my blog? 
 
PT / footy

Written by Veronica_Milvus (751 comments posted) 1st September 2008
Oh, way too clever for me, in the realm of sudoku. But I will wager that young Brett will have a go at this! 
 
Cool!

Written by Fledermaus (3490 comments posted) 1st September 2008
Now this is interesting! The meanings don't seem all that opposed though. Or do the left side girls not dance?
Fled! And all . . .
Written by Katanga (1515 comments posted) 1st September 2008
The girls on the left have never danced . . . (hypothesis) 
 
The girls on the right do it for a living. (antithesis) 
 
The whole thing together is real life (synthesis) 
 
This is what I meant, humbly and clumsily . . .  
 
See what I'm after, Fled? 
 
Cheers! 
 
John X

Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 1st September 2008
What a clever boy you are, John. Admirable attempt. 
 
There's a danger of form triumphing over content though. I wonder how often this form would be ideal to express an idea. 
 
Phil
Yes, Phil!
Written by Katanga (1515 comments posted) 1st September 2008
Just to put the record straight. 
 
I have sometimes let 'form' rule over 'content'. 
 
But it depends on what one is on about . . .  
 
and if there is anything interesting to say without its form . . . 
 
Sometimes, rarely, both combine . . .  
 
Too tired and enough said . . .  
 
'Take care with my heart, my Darling, she's made of glass' 
 
Donovan! 
 
Cheers! 
 
John XXX

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3569 comments posted) 1st September 2008
Way beyond me. I feel like a dog watching a card trick. 
jane
Please!
Written by Katanga (1515 comments posted) 1st September 2008
It's all a bit of fun, but thanks all! 
 
Footy - I am flattered that you like it. 
 
Please pm me if you wish to take it further . . . . 
 
Cheers! 
 
John  

Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 1st September 2008
Impressed! I was very confused about what this new form bu footy was about, until I read your explanation. This really is a strange form, but truly innovative. 
 
Mia 8)

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