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The Instinctive Violinist
By Veronica_Milvus
02 September 2008
An allegorical villanelle.

THE INSTINCTIVE VIOLINIST

I've always known I'd play the violin;
no need to practice or to read by sight,
I'll shove the bugger underneath my chin.

This tuning seems ok, so I'll begin;
if I say that this is music, then I'm right.
I've always known I'd play the violin.

Call all the music teachers, bring them in;
and tell them I don't rate their mocking spite.
I'll shove the bugger underneath my chin.

It's not my fault you hear a squealing din;
as music fans, you're really not that bright.
I've always known I'd play the violin.

I'll hire a concert venue in Berlin;
dear audience, why do you all take fright?
I'll shove the bugger underneath my chin.

To claim this is a craft would be a sin,
and all that talk of genius is shite!
I've always known I'd play the violin;
I'll shove the bugger underneath my chin.

Reviews

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3567 comments posted) 1st September 2008
You're obviously the Florence Foster Jenkins of the violin world. 
 
I own up that I wouldn't know a villanelle it is came up and sold me a Big Issue [even my spell checker hasn't heard of it] but I liked this. I thought the repetition really worked on a humorous level. I loved the subtle wit and humour of the piece and it made me wonder why there is so little witty poetry here. Well at least there is one. 
cheers 
jane
oho
Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 1st September 2008
You do have the sharpest of sharp tongues when you wish to use it!! 
 
(Or am I reading too much generally into this ? ) 
 
I like it I like it -- except that third line -- good the first time but not one that bears repetition as much as does the other repeat line. 
 
Fun though ! 
 
patterjack

Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 1st September 2008
I hear the allegory, VM. (At least I think I do.) It's funny, and witty. (I also hear exasperation.) I particularly liked the lines, 
 
"I'll hire a concert venue in Berlin; 
dear audience, why do you all take fright?" 
 
They made me laugh. 
 
Enjoyed! 
 
Mia :grin :grin
Wonderful!
Written by Brett (987 comments posted) 2nd September 2008
If I am right in my interpretaion then this gets funnier with each read - acerbic wit at its finest. 
Enjoyed very much. 
Cheers
Astounded!
Written by Katanga (1515 comments posted) 2nd September 2008
I think I see exactly what you mean by your 'allegory'. 
 
This, for me, is simply brilliant - I've read it again and again with immense pleasure! 
 
Other than that, words fail me . . . 
 
Cheers! 
 
John X

Written by Veronica_Milvus (751 comments posted) 2nd September 2008
Yes, I think you all got the allegory. In every form of artistic endeavour, it is wise to learn some basics and get some practice before declaring yourself to be Yehudi Menuhin, don't you think? 
 
Back to my arpeggios right now.
Yehudi Menuhin
Written by Katanga (1515 comments posted) 2nd September 2008
Do you know? 
 
As a snotty schoolboy at Westminster, some 35 yeazrs ago, I had the privilege of hearing and seeing Y. M. play his violin. 
 
I am not 'into' classical music as such (thug that I am), but watching, and listening to, a seventy-plus-year-old old man doing his thing destroyed me, in the best possible way, of course. 
 
There is art and there is art . . .  
 
There is music and there is music . . .  
 
And there is poetry and there is poetry . . .  
 
Yours is up there amongst the very best!  
 
Please keep practising! 
 
Yo! Ho! 
 
John X
That's wicked...
Written by ainsel (68 comments posted) 2nd September 2008
...and very, very funny! 
 
And, as always, beautifully assembled.  
 
I'm in awe of your skill with metre - it reads so naturally, and yet it's pretty well flawless. 
 
ainsel

Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 5th September 2008
No reviewers 'of note' then. 
 
Enjoyed this, Veronica - though it will change nothing. It was a good read and well constructed. 
 
I couldn't work out which was the dominant tone...anger, irritation or humour. 
 
Phil

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