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The Road To Joy
By maintenance
03 September 2008

I keep being told to put this in for poetry but it is not a piece of poetry, it's very short prose with an experimental layout.


He bought the matches,

and he sealed the door.

He lit the rag,

and he threw the bottle.

And as the smoke rose,

charring his lungs and stinging his eyes;

as the screams filled the night sky,

he wondered for the first time,

if this was the right thing to do.

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I like it
Written by pebble (40 comments posted) 28th October 2008
I think this might get more comments in the 100 word fiction forum. 
 
I'm not sure if the layout adds anything? To me it sounds like a great opening paragraph, or a prologue for a longer piece of work. 
 
Who is screaming? 
 
Its good, it makes me wonder what happens next. 
 

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