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Poetry
Dust.
By Reynaerde
03 September 2008

Hello.
You all seem like nice people.

[Cough]

Um...

That is all.



Dust and stone
and rocks and sticks
this was your city
built from brick

On the sea made of sand
by the hand of the hour
there's a boat built from blood
run on wavering power

Power in faith
Power of wind
Lost in the desert
on animal wings

On the sea made of sand
there's a little lost lamb
pulled forth by the Shepherd
that lost his flock
And following a tramp
of plague-ridden stock

On the sea made of sand
there's a girl in red
running away from a wolf
raised from the dead

On the sea made of sand
the Angels are smuggled
through ruin and wreck
to the ship's ruddy deck

In the desert they meet
in the desert they speak
the last little kin
lived with thier sin

All the others
They drowned
Beneath the wavering ground

Dust and stone
and rocks and sticks
this was your city
built from brick

Reviews

Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 3rd September 2008
I found this interesting, Reynaerde. I found the concrete images more appealing than the abstract lines. This piece seems to reflect cynicism, despair, perhaps even anarchistic defiance towards the system of belief we have traditionally held onto. It is not an unusual view, even among the older generation, perhaps even a fashionable view. 
 
Some artists reflect that sense of anti-reality or non-reality (I don't know what else to call it) by breaking with the traditional boundaries with deliberate discords placed in their form of art. Sometimes their art is full of discords, that it is 'chaotic' to the senses. This piece reminds of those artists. I particularly found the stanza about the lost lamb and the girl in red poignant. They sound like a hopeless observation about the state of leadership and people today. 
 
I think for such a piece to really take hold of readers' imagination, one must go beyond the usual nihilism, and say something more deeply personal. 
 
Still a thought-provoking piece. 
 
Mia 8)

Written by Reynaerde (6 comments posted) 4th September 2008
I'm no entirely sure if you're supposed to comment on your own stuff- it seems terribly egotistical- however, I am unfamiliar with the workings of this website and wish to somehow thank Mia for her kind comments. My thanks may well be riddled with errors- not my fault, honest, I'm using a keyboard which has gone quite mad. Also, without Microsoft Spellcheck, I’m really helpless. Quirk of Modernity. 
Anyway, Mia, thanks again for taking the time to read it, and for your evidently thoughtful response.  
(As for Dust’s status as Anti or Non-Reality, I say nothing… except- the people living there might have issues with you calling it that. Particularly the girl in Red. You really don’t want to make her mad. No, really. You don’t.) 
Thanks again for the comment. I have yet to read much of your work, although "Star" greatly appealed to me. Give me time. 
[That damnable old price.] 

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