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By Katanga
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04 September 2008 |
On the left - self restraint.
On the right - self indulgence.
Put together - sensible balance?
Dunno! Comments very welcome!
Cheers!
John X
There is a young poet in Wales
who is unique among males
in that I think
he refuses a drink
to compose what he knows never fails|
amazing
Written by footy (38 comments posted) 4th September 2008 | simply brilliant piece of intellectual word play John
it works amazingly well and fuses seemlessly
you are pushing the form to great new heights in a couple of days.
PT |
Written by Veronica_Milvus (751 comments posted) 5th September 2008 | | I don'tr think our Welsh bard EVER refuses a drink for any reason! However, neatly crafted poem! | Veronica I take exception to that remark
Written by Brett (987 comments posted) 5th September 2008 | I have refused both tea and coffee on many occassions.
I've also been refused drinks a few times.
However, Tolstoy, I do agree with V - neatly crafted.
Cheers |
Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 5th September 2008 | Hi John. Read a quite a few of these now, and it seems rude not to comment. Already said something similar on one of Brett's.
There's clearly a high degree of skill and effort that goes into some of these - something that is probably beyond my ability.
As a form though, it leaves me a little cold. It's a bit like admiring a very difficult and completed cryptic crossword - engaging in the solving, but not so much when complete.
Not a crit of your work - just the form. Perhaps I need educating.
Phil |
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3569 comments posted) 6th September 2008 | A great idea to use the limerick form. It seems to suit the concept. I'm still not too sure about them but this is the first one I've read that seemed [to me as a non poet] to make some sort of sense. It also raised a smile
jane | Just edited . . .
Written by Katanga (1515 comments posted) 6th September 2008 | . . . the last line from:
'to compose what we know never fails'
to 'to compose what he knows never fails'
Seems to make more sense and sounds neater?
Anyway, many thanks for your reviews above! They had me chortling no less than somewhat . . .
Beers!
John | E X C E L L E N T
Written by Josie (2847 comments posted) 7th September 2008 | | One word: EXCELLENT! I can recognize good work when I see it John ----- oooh! | Ah, now I understand.....
Written by Northern-nana (47 comments posted) 8th September 2008 | I wondered what all these cleaves were that were being written about. Had it explained to me by my daughter who spotted it right away. Now I understand - it's very clever, mad but clever. Wow!
Nana  |
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