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Poetry
Waiting Room
By TimCharigan
06 September 2008

Waiting Room


A waiting room
Where walls stare at the silence
And cap hangs on an empty chair
Tucked under a table
Which lingers, but no longer expects.


Parker pen, redundant now
Rests in premature peace
On newspaper cuttings
And half-written letters,
All that’s left of a life.


I stand, rooted but rootless,
And try to bypass the pain
To remember you here,
In your den, but all I feel
Is ourselves alone.


Unfinished business divides us;
Unspoken love between us.
When you left, I forgave you
For not saying goodbye.
I still need to forgive myself.


Reviews

Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 6th September 2008
The visual element to this works well. I don't know if I see what you see - but it's very vivid. 
 
The second half was less effective for me. There is a clear sense of sadness that comes over well - but I'm finding it hard to connect. Could just be me. 
 
Phil 

Written by grace (173 comments posted) 7th September 2008
For me, a beautiful, heartbreaking poem. 
 
This must surely come from experience, straight from the heart, (though I hope not).  
 
I can identify with every word from the grief following my late husband's sudden death. 
 
It brought a tear, I just hope this isn't autobiographical. It is however brilliantly written, 
 
blessings, Pamx 
 

Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 8th September 2008
Deeply painful. The first two stanzas were visual and impacting. The last two were more like a monologue, they were still vivid for me in their own way. As Pam says this sounds a little too real (hope it isn't), and though I haven't experienced anything like this, I could empathise. I don't know how one copes with something like this. Powerful. 
 
Mia

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