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Cleavage [new]
By Katanga
06 September 2008

A second attempt - the first was not relevant to the title.

Cheers!

John


                         Cleavage

   A pair of breasts out on display
  meet my requests to my dismay
 for two fine boobs are splendid jugs
    not hairy moobs the chests of thugs

Reviews

Written by Phil (8763 comments posted) 6th September 2008
I take it all back. Top class! 
 
Phil
Cheers Phil!
Written by Katanga (4169 comments posted) 6th September 2008
I was hoping to win you over in the end - but what a way to do it! 
 
Ha! Ha! 
 
John

Written by Phil (8763 comments posted) 6th September 2008
Anybody would admire a crossword in the shape of... :grin

Written by Fledermaus (4146 comments posted) 6th September 2008
Nice one, I think these cleave poems are a great invention. It seems that on the left side a verb is missing, but I guess it must be hard enough to do create three working poems in one. These even rhyme!!
Missing verb?
Written by Katanga (4169 comments posted) 6th September 2008
Thank you Fledermaus! 
 
I know it's clumsy, but what missing verb? 
 
I'm more than intrigued! 
 
Please elucidate . . .  
 
Cheers! 
 
John X

Written by Fledermaus (4146 comments posted) 6th September 2008
Oh, I misread it, my fault.  
I read: "A pair of breasts meet my requests for two fine boobs are not hairy moobs", but I see that was probably meant with a comma where I saw a verb ;)
Indeed, Maus!
Written by Katanga (4169 comments posted) 6th September 2008
Thanks! The whole thing hinges on the double syntactical use of 'for'. 
 
On the left it functions as a bound morpheme for the infinitive. 
 
On the right it functions as a conjunctive particle of cause and effect, 
 
Well spotted! 
 
Pretentious - Moi? 
 
Ha! Ha! Ha!  
 
I weep, but am very happy that you're reading my poor stuff! 
 
Beers again! 
 
John X 
 

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (5077 comments posted) 6th September 2008
Is moob a word? I know you're a teacher so I'm sure it is a word and I'm just showing my ingnorance. 
You do seem to be taking to this form like a moob to water [or what ever it is] 
jane
Oh Jane!
Written by Katanga (4169 comments posted) 6th September 2008
I am really chuffed that you have seen and even reviewed this! 
 
Yes, 'moob' is a newish word - it means 'man-boob'. 
 
I'm sure you know what this is alll about? 
 
The two pendular fatty appendages on middle-aged men'supper chests? 
 
Luckily I'm thin as a rake, so do not suffer from these . . . 
 
But so many do . . .  
 
Ho! Ho! 
 
Beers and Cheers! 
 
John X

Written by Josie (4035 comments posted) 7th September 2008
In my absence, John, I see that you have moved upwards and onwards from your usual subject of bottoms. lol. If men had to live with the constant irritation of bras, would they find breasts so appealing? I think not!! I agree with all the former reviews. Gret fun.

Written by Phil (8763 comments posted) 7th September 2008
As a young man, I was constantly irritated by bras. ;)

Written by grace (298 comments posted) 7th September 2008
Brilliant! 
 
Pamx :)

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