LUCKY, LUCKY, LUCKY!
Our lives are devastation with inflation running wild.
She's grinding food for animals to feed her starving child.
We may not have a Sunday roast, whatever shall we do?
Her baby's close to death tonight, he may not make it through.
It's possible subscription to the gym may have to go.
The rains have failed again this year, the crops will never grow.
The children need some trainers and they'll only have the best!
Her baby dies while cuddled to his mother's empty breast.
We've pared back to essentials, there is no way that we can save.
With tear soaked eyes a mother lays her baby in his grave.
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Great piece!
Written by JohnnyD (106 comments posted) 7th September 2008 |
Beautiful picturisation of the two worlds of the same globe. Really loved your imagination! Very strong and very true...
Johnny D |
Written by Lizzy (828 comments posted) 7th September 2008 |
Very well put Grace.
I thought the title was very good and the simplicity of the words just gave it so much more power.
Lizzy |
Written by grace (173 comments posted) 7th September 2008 |
Thank you Johnny, I'm so pleased this worked for you, this one really mattered to me,
sincerely,
Pamx |
Brilliant!
Written by Katanga (1515 comments posted) 7th September 2008 |
This is SO strong and well written, Pam.
I'm still trying to recover from your last line . . .
Gosh!
All the best,
John X |
Written by grace (173 comments posted) 7th September 2008 |
Thank you so much Lizzy and John,
I very much appreciate your kind comments and I'm very glad that the message comes through,
very sincerly,
Pamx |
Written by Josie (2847 comments posted) 7th September 2008 |
| Superb Writing Pam. How well you have brought this point over. I could say a lot more, but won't, except that most people in this country don't know true poverty as in other parts of the world. Excellent. Well done! |
Hi Grace
Written by jean.day (2366 comments posted) 7th September 2008 |
This was certainly a thought provoking poem - and one to make us think how lucky we are, as you have stated.
Well done. |
Written by grace (173 comments posted) 7th September 2008 |
Thank you very much indeed Josie and Jean,
I'm so pleased you think that the point is made, we really are very lucky aren't we, by comparison,
blessings, Pamx |
Written by Northern-nana (47 comments posted) 7th September 2008 |
This is beautifully written and is very sad but in a good way. Sometimes it's good to stop and take stock of what we have got, not what we haven't, and be grateful for it.
Nana |
Written by grace (173 comments posted) 7th September 2008 |
Hello nana,
thank you so much for your kind and thoughtful comments, I suppose it's all about perspective really,
warmest wishes, Pamx |
Written by Veronica_Milvus (751 comments posted) 8th September 2008 |
I enjoyed this - if that's the right word. Well-written and poignant. I wonder all the time how any of us in the developed world dare complain about our lives and the effects of the "credit crunch".
You are giving us back our sense of perspective. |
Written by grace (173 comments posted) 8th September 2008 |
Thank you so much Veronica, we are lucky aren't we?
I'm so grateful for your thoughtful comments,
very sincerely, Pamx |
Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 11th September 2008 |
With the above reviewers. Sometimes we need a rude awakening. (This was not rude, but sobering.)
Mia  |
Written by Amelia (36 comments posted) 13th September 2008 |
An incredibly powerful poem - you use juxtaposition magnificently.
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Written by grace (173 comments posted) 14th September 2008 |
Hello mia and Amelia,
thank you both so much for your kind and thoughtful comments on this piece, I'm so pleased you feel it's message comes through,
very sincerely, Pamx |
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