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F is for Frog
By Northern-nana
07 September 2008

Hope anyone can join in.  Nana


I found a frog upon a log in my garden

He calmly sat there winking at me in my garden

I looked at him, he looked at me

And from this look it was plain to see

That this was where he liked to be, in my garden.

 

“Hello”, I said, “you’re a handsome chap”

Won’t you sit upon my lap?”

So I picked him up and placed him down

Upon my knee on my dressing gown

And he crossed his legs and went to sleep, in my garden.

 

I called him Fred, he called me mum

And I cared for him like a special son.

I caught his flies, he ate them up

I bathed him down, and powdered him up

And he lazed out there without a care, in my garden.

 

Such joy he brought into my life, I hoped would never end

But on Monday morn he said to me, “I cannot be your friend”

“Why”, I cried?  The frog replied, “I’m sorry for I told you lies”

“I’m not a frog upon a log, but an ugly prince who’s in disguise.”

And he stood up straight and walked through my gate, out my garden.

  

 

Reviews
Gobsmacked!
Written by Katanga (1515 comments posted) 7th September 2008
This is the most refreshing piece I've read for ages! 
 
I've tried children's poetry myself, but somehow this is in a different league . . . 
 
Whoooo! REALLY good. 
 
The repetition of 'in my garden' is amazing, to be hit at the end by 'out my garden'. 
 
Incredible! 
 
I shall be revisiting and revisiting this! 
 
In admiration! 
 
John X
Witty Intelligent Nana...
Written by JohnnyD (106 comments posted) 7th September 2008
First few paras you made me smile and in the end you made me laugh... Overall, you made me realise you are really a loving caring Nana with a noble soul and one who is really lovingly creative! Loving every single work of yours Nana. 
 
Lots of love,  
 
Johnny D
Funny!
Written by applemuncher (39 comments posted) 7th September 2008
I loved reading this because it made me laugh and it was a really clever story - there's quite a lot going on in the poem and it's beautifully executed. 
 
Although you've written this for children I think everyone reading this will love it.

Written by Josie (2847 comments posted) 8th September 2008
I have to say Nana that I agree with the other. It is a lovely poem, so beautiful in its simplicity. I am sure children would love it. Do keep writing here.

Written by 1211kellie (177 comments posted) 12th September 2008
What a really interesting poem. I found it so amusing. I love frogs and so does my sister, a couple of times when she was cutting the grass she accidently mowed over a frog. She was in tears and was so distraught that my mum had to race round there because she thought something really serious had happened. 
 
Anyway I really loved this. 
 
 
Kellie

Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 12th September 2008
What a lovely tale-poem (is there such a term?)! Really enjoyed this. What a peculiar story and an unexpected end. Somehow one feels for the woman, and I feel some things are left unsaid at the end, and that makes the piece more effective. The repetition of 'in my garden' was interesting. I felt the garden was a special place for the woman, private and safe. So the way it finished, 'out my garden', made an impact. 
 
Mia 8)

Written by Northern-nana (47 comments posted) 13th September 2008
Thank you to everyone who posted such enthusiastic comments, this is very encouraging. 
 
Nana :)

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