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Raggedy Ann: Mark II

By kitten_princess

18 January 2006

Listening to a Rufus Wainwright song, with the phrase "Raggedy Andy" in it... I think it partially inspired this piece.

As usual, I dislike the title, and would love feedback and comments!

I found her in the corner
Upstairs, where no one goes any more.

She was torn, tears escaping from her
Blue thread eyes, leaking down her
Soft fabric face. She was perfect.

She wasn't like the others.
Not a hard porcelain doll
With coiffed ringlets sitting on her head
And glassy eyes cooler than the night sea.

She wasn't a plastic figurine
Pristine in the box,
Never been opened,
Never been touched.

She looked up at me
I held out a hand.
She reached out
With those stuffed limbs

Just awkward Ann.
No longer raggedy.

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Written by robb-h-cliftown (1 comments posted) 18th January 2006

Raggedy Ann: Mark II

[I like the title except I wouldn't understand what Mark II means]

where no one goes any more

[I think "where no one goes" would have enough sufficiency]

coiffed ringlets

[Unfortuantely I had to look that up so either you have great word use or I need to broaden my vocabulary! It looks like you have good use of specific words. A writer needs to use the right words, not just 'curles' etc.]

She wasn't a plastic figurine
Pristine in the box,
Never been opened,
Never been touched.

[You designate this group very well.]

She looked up at me
I held out a hand.
She reached out
With those stuffed limbs

Just awkward Ann.
No longer raggedy.

[Great. Very unique voice. ]

Written by no1butClo (341 comments posted) 19th January 2006

yay! pretty! and lovely and so you it's unbelieveable.

Associations ..........
Written by Bagheera (683 comments posted) 20th January 2006

Never having had a doll, I found myself picturing very clearly as I read this the (original) line drawings of Christopher Robin trailing a battered-looking Pooh up (down??) the stairs ... beautiful bathos, not overdone: thoroughly enjoyable and not a word too many. :grin

Written by IPFaulkner (83 comments posted) 2nd June 2006

First time I read this I didn't like it and, because I like to say something I decided I better read it again. At which point I found I do like it. Just a little glimpse of something isn't it? An old doll and its associations and nothing more.

Really good

IPF

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