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Poetry
What Remains
By Ane88
13 September 2008
What remains is a dream and no more,
    It stays unchanged and worthless;
What remains is broken and torn
    And it holds no hope over from the past.

Your hateful words are but a thorn in my side,
    They prick yet do not pierce—
Do you think I cannot hear your lies?
    Did you think I would not form my own?

Love is an unforgiving emotion
    So let’s be careful not to let it out;
Your needs, that weakness— your devotion—
    How do we know it’s real?

What remains, what stays— this game
    Leaves ashes and remnants of the fallen;
Let us laugh, you and I, at what remains,
    While wondering who will fall first.

Reviews

Written by KaydieKate (75 comments posted) 28th September 2008
There is a very bitter, powerful central idea driving this poem. It lacks conventional rhyme; but I felt the rhythm while reading it. It seemed to come and go, though, like a teenage driver stomping on the gas petal. All in all, I liked it.

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