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Poetry
For Pam
By Katanga
13 September 2008

Clumsily, meant as a tribute to 'Cornflowers and Poppies', which Pam (grace) posted on 10 September.

In my opinion, a must-read piece, if you haven't seen it already.

The title and content refer to her justification in the reviews for using short lines.

An experimental rhyme-scheme - a, b, c, b, d, c, d, a.

Do you think it works? Comments, as ever, more than welcome.

Cheers Pam, and everyone!

John X


Gusts of Breeze


In my quiet evening
your lines engage
light gusts of breeze
leave the page
float up above
rise to soothe and ease
my aching eyes with love
your deep heart's meaning

Reviews

Written by grace (173 comments posted) 13th September 2008
Oh John, how beautiful, 
 
thank you so very much for taking something so lovely from my poem, how could you possibly describe this as clumsy.  
 
I don't know if my piece deserved a tribute but I'm very touched by this, 
 
my most sincere thanks, 
 
Pamx :)

Written by Brett (987 comments posted) 19th September 2008
I like the rhythm and the rhyme scheme. 
 
Cheers

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