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Raspberry Fool
By penless
21 January 2006

A recipe for a successful dinner party


Raspberry fool. Very tasty.

When you make this dish, it requires meringues and the raspberry mix which is made separately. What you do for the latter is mash up the berries in a bowl with a fork and whilst doing so add some sugar to taste.

So she's attacking this large bowl of berries in the kitchen and I come in. We've been together for around six months but I still fancy her something rotten. I put my arms around her from behind and I've got such an erection it hurts. You'll know what I mean.

She's got her period right now, story of my life. We could fuck, she'd do it, we've done it before, but I know she'd rather not. All that blood. Bothers her more than me.

"I can't wait" I force the words out breathlessly, like I'm drowning, hoping she'll blow me instead, something she's usually quite happy to do.

She stops mashing, pulls down my jeans and pants and gets down to work. That mouth! I've never believed in god but on occasion I have to admit there could be something in it after all.

I'm almost there anyway, just from the anticipation of it all. Then the move I could never have foreseen. She pulls away before I've done the business and while I'm about to gasp out why she's stopped, she's grabbed the bowl of half mashed raspberries, tilted it towards my penis and then finishes me off with a couple of deft hand strokes. I'm too far gone to wonder what she's up to and shoot my bolt straight into the waiting bowl. She waits for the thick white spurts to subside and whispers what a good boy I am.

She then calmly carries on mashing the fruit. "I want you in there" she murmurs. I say nothing. We have our two best friends coming round that evening for a meal.

We take our time over the food, she is a great cook. The second course is of course, the raspberry fool. Meringues in each dish and she spoons carefully the raspberry mix over them, sprinkling just a very light dressing of icing sugar over each for the finishing touch and giving me a knowing look.

It tastes delicious, if I do say so myself. Our guests are clearly delighted, both of them requesting second helpings. The lady of the couple says to my lady "This is absolutely fantastic, you must let me have the recipe."

Raspberry fool. Very tasty.

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Written by Espiral (44 comments posted) 3rd May 2006
...perhaps because most people's reaction is a mixture of expressions that can't be put easily into words.  
 
Anyway it made me laugh out loud, grimace, and at the same time admire the way you write. This was the first piece I read of yours and I quickly checked out some others to see if this was your regular style of storywriting - I'll admit I was relieved to see your evident versatility! You do have a very direct style of writing, no hint of shying away, which is best illustrated in this piece I think, but I also like your sensitivity and ability to mute that directness in 'Love Letters'. 
 
:grin
Thanks
Written by penless (25 comments posted) 4th May 2006
I appreciate your comments Espiral.

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