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Lament for the Six Towns
By Veronica_Milvus
14 September 2008
Those of you who have read any Arnold Bennett will be forgiven for thinking that Stoke on Trent consists of five towns.  There are actually six (Tunstall, Burslem, Hanley, Stoke, Fenton and Longton) which were cobbled into a sort of federation in 1910.  The motto is "Vis Unita Fortior" to which I make a reference in the poem.

In the 2001 census, 24.2% of households of non-pensioner age were recorded as having no working adults (Wikipedia).  Since I was a kid, many of the potteries, the tyre factory, the steel works and the mines have all closed or reduced to an unrecognisable stump of their former selves.

JB Priestley's book "An English Journey" written in 1934, slags the City off something rotten.

I passed the motorway exit yesterday, and had a few tears, although I no longer have any family or close friends there.

This is really by way of a song lyric, with verses and choruses of a sort.  If I could write music, this would be my Billy Bragg moment.

LAMENT FOR THE SIX TOWNS

Here's to the coal, canals and clay
that made you Something, yesterday.
Here's to hard-working artisans
who shaped such beauty with their hands;
and to the bottle kilns, whose smoke
would make the workers' children choke.

Oh, my poor hometown
Your fame was from your red soil made
your products cherished and displayed;
practical art,so pleasing.

Six towns into a city bound;
"In unity, may strength be found".
Though "Lilliput"'s what Priestley calls
the six towns, with their six town halls.
No grandeur fuels your civic pride;
no glimpses of horizons wide.

Oh, my poor hometown
I'd raze your narrow streets, and then
build up a New Jerusalem!
A city worth believing.

The pot bank windows, blank and dark,
the tileworks now a retail park.
The paintresses and potters are
laid off at last to work no more.
The Trentham coal mine has become
the local football stadium.

Oh, my poor hometown
Your industry is on its knees
since skilled jobs all went overseas
and the bright kids started leaving.

Eight thousand livelihoods, no less
depended on the tyre press.
Streets dusted, once, with Carbon Black,
the reek of rubber won't come back.
The town a poorer place by far
since steelworks closed at Shelton Bar.

Oh, my poor hometown
No pots, no tyres, no steel, no coal,
The growing business is the Dole
and hope is all-deceiving.

When everything but shops is dying
I wonder who can still be buying.
For hands and brains that once knew skills
there's little joy in working tills.
For those with higher education
here's no career motivation.

Oh, my poor hometown;
those who remain, ambition lack;
my heart knows that I won't be back
among the low achieving.

Oh, my poor hometown;
your poverty and dereliction
are no longer my affliction,
but still I find I'm grieving.

Reviews

Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 14th September 2008

Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 14th September 2008
So do I lament
Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 14th September 2008
For family reasons now long in the past . 
 
Too much there for me to say more than highly evocative for me 
 
patterjack.

Written by grace (173 comments posted) 14th September 2008
Superbly and sympathetically written with passion and pride in the past. . . this left me feeling so sad. 
 
Powerful and thought provoking, 
 
Pamx

Written by Brett (1113 comments posted) 15th September 2008
A passionate lament, V, and one that really affected this reader. All too true, and not just of your six towns, but too many others. 
There are some very subtle rhymes here (become/stadium, education/motivation) and I thought that the rhyming of the final lines of each 'chorus' cleverly handled. 
A very strong piece in both content and form. 
Billy Bragg would be proud! 
Cheers

Written by Phil (7169 comments posted) 21st September 2008
Thought this was a good read - could almost hear it sung by a coarse voiced crooner - like BB. 
 
In theme, it could be just about anywhere in the UK - at least the parts I've lived in. 
 
Strong and evocative.  
 
Phil

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