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A Young Man's Lament
By Northern-nana
15 September 2008
Let me tell you about young Tom
Who wouldn't listen to his Mom.
She warned him every single day
"Don't wander off and go away."

But he thought that he knew best
And wandered off with all the rest.
Off to were the big boys go
Even though she'd told him "No".

Down the road and round the bend
He marched along for hours on end.
He passed a wood, a field as well
He went up hill and down the dell.

He marched past cows and horses too
Who shouted, "Tom, what's wrong with you?
You should have listened when she said,
"Don't stray from home, stay here instead."

He travelled on without a care
And met a girl with golden hair.
He smiled at her and took her hand
She was the fairest in the land.

"I've waited ages, where've you been?"
She nagged him and was really mean.
And Tom was sorry that he'd come
He should have listended to his Mum.


Nana

Reviews
Very well written!
Written by applemuncher (46 comments posted) 15th September 2008
I usually struggle to read poetry but I found this very readable - I liked the fact that I started out thinking that Tom was really young then later we found out that he's off to meet a girl! 
 
 
Vary amusing but just so well written! Keep them coming Nana!

Written by Lizzy (966 comments posted) 15th September 2008
I enjoyed this too. Kept me smiling throughout. 
Lizzy

Written by Robru (319 comments posted) 16th September 2008
 
I enjoyed this immensely. Reminded me of my own misspent youth and where I went. Has a musical lilt to it as well and that adds to the story. 
 
Cheers and keep them coming 
 
Bob

Written by Northern-nana (47 comments posted) 16th September 2008
This started life as a poem for children but couldn't resist the twisty ending. Thanks Lizzy and Bob for your kind comments.  
 
Nana :)

Written by grace (298 comments posted) 16th September 2008
Excellent nana! :grin  
 
It's a great twist and quite right too, a thoroughly enjoyable read, 
 
thank you, 
 
Pamx :)

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