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Poetry
Riparian Dreams
By grace
17 September 2008

Upriver in the shallow quick,

where pebbles gleam, a hands width deep,

dart silver fish, a finger long,

black of eye and sleek of fin,


and I shall sit in sheltered lee

of wattled walls, cosy daubed,

relaxed of limb and heavy eyed

beneath a sky of solar joy.


In meadow close, a skylark trill

reminds the breeze to ruffle wings,

to stroke the buttercups and wheat,

to sway the view in gentle pass,


and still along riparian edge,

the willows lean and kiss the flow,

as dragonflies dart pearly swift

while surface bursts with leaping gills.


I shall bequeath this timeless gift,

to unknown souls as yet unborn,

that they may rest as Nature's heirs

in ancient green and quiet repose.









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Rhyme
Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 17th September 2008
Or in this case , its lack --that fits with the meter and rhythms you have used-- made this interesting for me . 
 
There are some interesting adjective / noun combinations too -- some of which have an antique flavour that reflects the above. 
 
patterjack 
 
 

Written by Veronica_Milvus (751 comments posted) 18th September 2008
I liked this, you have a good way with language, I liked "pearly swift" and "shallow quick". I've never liked the word "riparian" though, always makes me think of crops ripening, not rivers. I might have written 
 
"and still along the river's edge" 
 
Your poem akes me think about seeking inspiration by just going off somewhere and sitting.
Fabulous . . .
Written by Katanga (1515 comments posted) 25th September 2008
. . . use of imagery here, Pam! Really love it! 
 
I confess I had to Google 'riparian'! Must be very rare in poetry and probably never used in a song? 
 
Reminds me of Al Stewart's use of 'misnomer' in a song, with the immortal line 'You're just a gentle misnomer for a shooting star.' Probably unique! 
 
Cheers! 
 
John X

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