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Sacrifice
By raymondo
18 September 2008

This started life as an exercise to write a story with as few words as possible without losing the "plot". So, from 500 I've whittled it down to 134.

I think it could do with a further "trim" what do you think.


I’d wanted a rearrangement for weeks, needed better access to my PC screens. With the air conditioning down, I wanted everything closer to the window for better ventilation and light

A change is as good as a rest’, - they say.

I had some unexpected help…

Three, what I assumed were removal men, assisted me. They were grey of face and boiler suits, silent.

They proceeded to pull out cables, drag out cabinets, and bookcases. I heard the crash of computers dumped outside my office window.

They’d re-arranged the desks…then left. Two returned, followed by two, even more expressionless men supporting a battered soldier who leaked blood over my executive blue shag pile.

Well, I thought. May as well go home.

We all have to make small sacrifices in time of war.

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Written by ianhobsonuk (180 comments posted) 21st October 2008
Too short. Couldn't figure out what the story was about. 
 
Ian

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