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Cheeky
Written by grace (173 comments posted) 21st September 2008 |
A clever, cheeky, seductive and amusing write with a superb and witty conclusion! 
The analogy with the road is perfect. I thoroughly enjoyed this,
thank you, Pam
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A break
Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 21st September 2008 |
Thought I needed a change from my usual aged angst
By coincidence , as I finished it , I came across the Ronnie Barker quote -- very apt , I thought .
Thank you for the review .
patterjack |
Wonderful!
Written by Brett (987 comments posted) 21st September 2008 |
Very witty and very enjoyable, Brian. Loved 'slippery surface'!
Reminds me of the pervert who was arrested for jumping a red light and pulling off the road.
Cheers |
The awful thing is
Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 21st September 2008 |
that I have not been able to go by a road sign for a long time without sniggering.
Not good for my driving .
Thanks Brett
patterjack |
Very clever
Written by punchy (535 comments posted) 21st September 2008 |
I am rather slow and it took me a couple of rereads but now I get it I think it is hilarious.
P x
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Written by Fledermaus (3490 comments posted) 21st September 2008 |
| I think I do get it, but I'm not entirely sure. It's probably related to phone-boot-size shop-windows in certain alleys in Amsterdam? |
No Maus
Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 21st September 2008 |
That's not my territory.
The references ( if any need be taken ) would be more local .
Thanks for the comment
patterjack |
orr...
Written by fellpony (1720 comments posted) 21st September 2008 |
in the words of the late Adrian Henry:
I wanted your soft verges
but you gave me the hard shoulder.
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Big one missing
Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 21st September 2008 |
One road sign , often seen but rarely believed, is Men at Work
It was nearly the title -- but logically I had to discard it because of the plural
Thanks Paula
patterjack |
Right on , Sue
Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 21st September 2008 |
That line has been a favourite of mine for a long time , and I tucked it on to my TexEdit for reference in replying to a review -- should it be needed .
You have saved me the trouble !!!
I discarded the epigraph A nod to Adrian when I ran across the Barker quote .
Thanks for the comment
patterjack |
Impressed!
Written by Katanga (1515 comments posted) 21st September 2008 |
'You ask for a poem -
I offer you a blade of grass.'
Brian Patten
Your excellent piece reminds of . . . (above)
Cheers!
John |
That group, Katanga,
Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 21st September 2008 |
... of like poets were a solid influence on a lot of my students -- whose enthusiasm brushed off onto me too
My Penguin book of their poems is now very battered from much use.
Thanks for the review
patterjack |
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3569 comments posted) 22nd September 2008 |
Yes, but that is the delicious pleasure in reading it, it can only really mean one thing and with each double/single entendre it gets funnier and funnier. There is something wonderfully inclusive about these sort of humorous pieces; you're so pleased to be in on the joke.
I'm sure they are more difficult to write than it appears. You have to keep it in check. In my ignorance I don't differentiate between this and the other more literary pieces.This was art and very funny too. It had that clever subversive quality of Adrian Henry and Lerher, too.
We call speed bumps sleeping policemen here but it only encourages you go over them even faster
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Before Roundabouts
Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 22nd September 2008 |
... which is another sign I did not include -- there might be a whole stanza devoted to it yet ! -- we had a metal dome central to the crossroads , called a silent cop . It was best not to hit it , and they were removed when the diamond turn became law.
I quite enjoyed this piece of idle vulgarity-- and as usual , enjoyed your review Jane .
Many thanks
patterjack
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