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The Family Seat
By grace
21 September 2008

Mary dear, do sit awhile,

come here and rest your feet.

I knew if I sat here

there would be someone nice to meet.


This bench has been a friend

since my dear Wilfred passed away,

it's dedicated to him and

I come here every day.


When it rains, I don't sit down,

I say hello and leave,

I find it so much friendlier

than by a grave to grieve.


Oh look! There's Mrs. Richards,

Yoo Hoo! Bless her, see, she waved.

She's shaky on the cobbles,

better she stays where it's paved.


I dare say she is busy,

what's that? Oh, you have to go.

I understand. . .you've family,

they need you home, I know.


Well now Wilfred, here we are,

just you and me once more,

I don't think there'll be others dear,

it's nearly half past four.


The children are all home from school,

the 'oldies' are at tea,

the shops are packing things away,

the sun has set I see.


I'll leave you now my darling,

for it's getting very dark.

you know I'm not too keen,

when it gets late, to cross the park.


I shall be back tomorrow,

there'll be lots of friends I know.

Night night, God bless my darling,

now I really have to go.











Reviews
Theme
Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 21st September 2008
This theme is a recurrent one for you .  
 
You have developed a particular voice for it . 
 
Gentle . 
 
patterjack

Written by Robru (272 comments posted) 21st September 2008
 
I love the sentiments expressed here. What better place to grieve than a seat where the two probably spent time waiting for buses and such. 
I think this is a lovely poem. 
 
Cheers 
 
Bob

Written by Northern-nana (47 comments posted) 23rd September 2008
I enjoy this type of poem you write - Mother Please and Good Morning Mrs Murray. This one seems rather sad and poignant - she seems rather lonely without her Wilfred. :sigh  
 
 
 
Nana
I agree . . .
Written by Katanga (1515 comments posted) 25th September 2008
. . . with all the positive comments above. 
 
I love the way the 'chatty' style ('Oh look! . . . 'Yoo Hoo' etc is in stark contrast to the mournful theme. 
 
And your ending brings tears to my eyes . . . 
 
Cheers! 
 
John X

Written by grace (173 comments posted) 25th September 2008
Thank you so much everyone, I'm so pleased that you can feel the atmosphere of this. I like to think that although she is sad and lonely, she's almost contended when she sits on her seat 'with' Wilfred, 
 
I'm very grateful for your kind comments, 
 
Pamx

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