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Lavender Mothballs.
By Songster
03 April 2005

A true memory.


Lavender Mothballs

Sweet scented lavender, mothballs and summer -
and time slips back. I am a child in the room
where great aunt Gertie lives within her memories.
She's stroking her grey cat; its contented purr
thrums in the shadows and we long for sun.

We eat the chocolate she gives us though it
has a taste of mothballs; she hoards it with her
lace-trimmed underwear.  She talks of things long past -
again she tells us how it happened that,
one day, she met the Queen, Victoria.

We shift and fidget, wish out visit over.
Beckoning us is her neglected garden
where a tortoise dozes on a warm stone path.
We think of outside, long to rediscover
the old toad crouching in a disused drain.

Songster.



 

 

Reviews
fabulous
Written by kevinrobson71 (42 comments posted) 3rd April 2005
a childhood a lot of people can identify with-very strong , evocative
Brilliant
Written by Betsie (30 comments posted) 15th April 2005
Really love this one - you planted the picture in my mind. And you evoked that feeling of impatience that the very young have when in the company of the very old and having to suffer 'duty visit'.  
 
Line one - last stanza: did you mean our and not out?

Written by Songster (52 comments posted) 15th April 2005
Thanks Betsie,  
You are quite right. Out is a misprint which I did not notice. I went back to my work but the original is now so peculiar it's obviously too late to change it.

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