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By Brett
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23 September 2008 |
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The circus rolls with joy and glee
into town a novelty
an ageing clown shows its face
proving youthful without disgrace
to such old jokes we all connect
though his respect through our neglect
no longer chimes of ancient rhymes. |
Cleavage
Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 23rd September 2008 | I must admit to an interest in a different area , Brett.
The form does have a bit of a siren quality about though it often results in what becomes la- la- lorelei-ing , lacking in sharp definition . This I have found to be the case when reading them elsewhere .
But it's a valiant area for combat with language. A good attempt
patterjack
| Brian, I agree
Written by Brett (1001 comments posted) 23rd September 2008 | This is my last stand within this form, not because of its restrictions or difficulties (you know me better than that).
Cheers | Your last stand?
Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 25th September 2008 | If this really is your 'last stand within this form', which would be a shame, it's a jolly good one!
Cheers!
John |
Written by footy (38 comments posted) 28th September 2008 | Thanks Brett
here it is:
Cleaves from greatwriting
PT Diep |
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