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Paulito's Bug

By sutpau

25 September 2008

Slender and delicate

Beauty abundant

Golden heart and mind giving

What chance that you should land

Beside such a lonely man?

From the ether you came

A great surprise

Merciful bounty

Heaven-sent, fate, or chance

A great surprise

What chance that you should land

Beside such a lonely man?

Conjecture not

Celebrate instead

For land you did

And now I’m whole

A once empty pail now filled

By your charms

No longer alone now I can soar

With my beautiful Bug

Odd how under that beautiful bug shell

Such sadness lurked

A great surprise

That one so full of nature’s gifts

Could yet be lonely too

For so long on the wing searching, hoping ...

A great surprise

Yet, together now, how sweet life is

A duet in the spring chorus

Symphony

Hearts beating in sympathy

A great surprise

Beautiful Bug

So sensitive and delicate

So in need

Yet so easy to feed

When you landed, you gave purpose

To a lonely man.

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Truly masterful...
Written by Jonaus (11 comments posted) 25th September 2008

For me, this poem symbolises the glorious nature of love at first sight and how it can seemingly be bestowed upon us as much by luck as it is by fate. I may be viewing this work in its most simplistic form, but this is what it speaks to me.

I particularly love the recurring reference to the delicacy of the "bug". In my eyes, this could either be the person we love themselves (as in we see them as delicate and therefore in need of protection) or the nature of love itself (as in it is a very "delicate" emotion and can be very easily crushed). With the recurring themes of loneliness and sympathy, I also conjure up the concept of soulmates, two halves who aren't complete until they find the other.

And finally, I love how the words have been sculpted on the page, as if they are being gently blown about in the breeze, bringing us all the way back to the idea of fate versus luck and how in theory, anything can change depending on how the wind blows.

Brilliant poem and I plan on looking at some of your other work.

Lovely
Written by Rioka (8 comments posted) 26th September 2008

I think this poem's beautiful, I've come back and read it again several times. It flowed well, and had a very natural and earnest feel which the layout contributed to.

Personally, I felt that this poem was about the great significance we attach to normally trivial things - like a bug landing next to us - when we are lonely; and that it was his own sadness the narrator saw reflected in his bug. Of course, that might not be what you meant at all, that's just how I read it.

Thanks for posting this.

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