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The Corpse of the Soul
By Jonaus
25 September 2008
I apologize for the dark nature of this poem I assure you that it's not indicative of my usual work and you're not dealing with a manic depressive (as far as I know!) I wrote this after seeing someone I once loved greatly spiraling down into an endless pit of lying and manipulation. Even though I wrote it, sections of this work are still very poignant even to me. I'd like to see if others agree.

I would say enjoy, but I'm not sure if that's the right term in this case. So, "absorb" instead, perhaps.

They blink, they talk and they can even live their lives without most people noticing,

But they are dead; their soul was destroyed long ago.

They are a poisoned, walking, breathing corpse.

There is no hope.

 

Their eyes are deep, dark, never-ending pools of choking despair.

Murky windows to a heart that is gripped by an icy fist of hatred.

It still beats, but only to traffic a corrupted blood around a desolate body.

There is no hope.

 

The skin is wrong; the colour is that of a fleshed-out ghost, the touch synthetic.

They have lost all ability to share warmth; a single caress chilling a spine.

Their core is frigid, only saved from inevitable decay by deep-freeze.

There is no hope.

 

The darkness swirls through the mind as a demon of chaos.

It poisons words and taints the views, dulling to monochrome.

No joy can be drawn from that which is devoid of life’s palette.

There is no hope.

 

Nightmarish creatures of hate, anger, deception and mistrust abound.

They swirl in the belly of the fallen like maggots in an over-ripe cadaver.

They spew from the gullet a dark honey of false repent.

 There is no hope.

 

The loved of the fallen refuse to see the truth; they prey for miracles.

They linger in hopes of a mere glimpse of past’s comforting apparition.

Yet they know, that which they love is gone, replaced by the Devil’s puppet.

There. Is. No. Hope.

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Scary
Written by meadowcroft1964 (112 comments posted) 25th September 2008
Jonaus  
Scary but at the same time fascinating. Excellent descriptions showing the darker side of human nature.  
On a more personal note I just like to say don't give up entirely miracles do happen and perhaps your friend will one day find their true self again. I don't wish to preach but one phase comes to mind when reading your poem "There but for the grace of God go I". I have also had the pleasure of reading your posting on G.W. forum and for what it's worth I agree with your family you do have a talent for writing good luck Violet  
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
Jonaus, welcome to GW.
Written by Brett (1001 comments posted) 25th September 2008
First, let me say that I did find this piece lacking in rhythm (those here more skilled in free verse may prove me wrong) and that the repetition of 'There is no hope' a little cliched. 
However there are some phrases that clearly show a love of language and imagery; 'but only to traffic a corrupted blood...', 'an over-ripe cadaver', 'the Devil's puppet'. 
 
Cheers

Written by Aurora (67 comments posted) 25th September 2008
I really liked this and felt drawn in immediately. My favorite word was 'monochrome' and I think you have a natural talent for creating imagery. I will look forward to your next posting :)  
 
Aurora

Written by Bookwormandco. (39 comments posted) 27th September 2008
I agree with Meadowcroft1964 on this one. 
The language you use is very powerful, and sets a chilling atmosphere.  
'Tis a tad too Emo-ish for a genre for my tastes though. 
Keep writing! 
Bookworm & friends

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