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A Perfect Juxtaposition

By Kezzi

28 September 2008

• Juxtaposition ~ noun
[1.] An act or instance of placing close together or side by side opposing objects or ideas, esp. for comparison or contrast.
[2.] The state of being close together or side by side.

This is a snippet of poetry I managed to squeeze out of myself between college assignments.
The layout is a bit iffy because the format came out rather...asymmetrical. xD Lots of varying sentence structures. Hope you like it, anyway!

A Perfect Juxtaposition

I thoroughly hate loving you.

      Your heart is a perfectly-carved stone;
      Set deep into your chest, soft as granite.

      I grip you gently with angels’ claws;
      Icy breath scorching your warm, shivering skin.

      Your hard topaz eyes shimmer liquidly;
      Evaporating my soul with their numbing heat.

Together we fall upwards, drowning in the very air that whistles past our entwined, separate bodies.

      Your moist lips deliver a dry kiss upon mine;
      I can live neither with nor without you, my sweet oxymoron.

You and I;
      A perfect juxtaposition.

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Written by Brett (2419 comments posted) 29th September 2008

The phrase 'soft as granite' I really like! And 'my sweet oxymoron' is a good phrase.

Unfortunately I felt that the rest of the poem carried no weight (unlike myself). Only my humble opinion, you understand.

I also don't think there was any need for an introduction to the word 'juxtaposition.'

Cheers

It lives as its title suggests......
Written by Ranes (62 comments posted) 12th October 2008

Actually, I like the constant juxtaposition you get into lines throughout this poem. soft/granite, icy/scorching, warm/shivering, hard eyes shimmering, moist lips/dry kiss etc.

Like Brett, "soft as granite" hit me extremely well.

totally free form structure works to keep it loose.

I may not be any sort of poet....but I thought this was both well delivered and interesting.

RANES

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