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A FRAGMENT - In the style of John Keats
By MattHews
03 October 2008
 
  First, my thanks to mia-ms-kim and Gwynedd for your kind comments on 'To a Coy Mistress', added to others after I had left for a three week break.
Incidentally, I'm not sure whether I've yet got the hang of exchanging
views and thanking people for appreciative views. Anyway, thanks to all who commented on my work so far, whether appreciatively, adversely, or otherwise
 
  Now a try at Keats, especially for Brett.

 
   A Fragment - by 'John Keats'

   The westering sun drops low behind the lea,
   And my sad soul, as though in sympathy,
   Sinks heavily into a darkling sea
   Of Stygian gloom; and Oh, how happy would I be
   To welcome in my arms that Bride of Death,
   The pale Persephone! For I would claim her for my own,
   Usurp the mighty Lord of Hades,
   Seize his dark realm to dwell among the Shades;
   For I am weary of my days
   And long to leave Life's stony ways!

Reviews

Written by Veronica_Milvus (768 comments posted) 3rd October 2008
He was a bit miserable, but then so would you be if you were a penniless medical student, dying of consumption and in love with Fanny...you have got the ambiance of JK very nicely!
Agreed
Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 3rd October 2008
As Veronica remarks , gloomy. But Keats was not always that way inclined , he did lift into the sunlight and optimism of realms of gold now and then ! 
 
That opening line has a strong touch of Gray about it ! 
 
Well done. 
 
patterjack 
 
 
Malcolm, thanks.
Written by Brett (1001 comments posted) 3rd October 2008
I'd forgotten your promise to 'do' Keats (so to speak). 
Admirable, indeed. 
 
Regarding 'miserable' let us not forget 'Lines On THe Mermaid Tavern', 'A Song About Myself' etc. But he was at his best when 'reflective.' 
 
Cheers
Keats
Written by sutpau (18 comments posted) 4th October 2008
Admirable, it has the feeling of age, the smell of age, and the subject matter - distressed, distressing and delightful!

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