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MURDER OF A MITE
By MattHews
04 October 2008
This is an attempt to draw attention to the impenetrable questions of what constitutes animate awareness, intent, consciousness and our interaction with other living entities in all their complexity, even at a microscopic level.

Thanks to those who have commented on the 'Keats' fragment. Yes, he had his ecstatic highs as well as his stygian lows. Maybe the fashionable addiction to opium had something to do with it.

 
  Murder of a Mite

  What deeds what needs
  What procreative lust
  Animates this minute speck of dust?

  A living entity
  Of intricate complexity,
  It moves, now fast, now slow,
  Alert, all systems on the go,
  While I decide its fate.
  It darts, it dodges - but, oh dear me, too late!
 
  Now just a smudge
  Soiling the finger of its casual judge:
  It had a life of sorts,
  But such a life defies my thoughts.
 

Reviews
Superb!
Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 4th October 2008
Your first three lines stand alone! 
 
Less is more, as someone said (?) 
 
Your other lines are brilliant, but are they really necessary? 
 
I think it's brilliant anyway! 
 
Thoroughly enjoyed, and you've left me with much to tread upon . . . 
 
Beers! 
 
Tolstoy 
 
 
 

Written by Phil (6997 comments posted) 4th October 2008
Enjoyed this - not sure I supposed to - but I smiled broadly at the end.  
 
Phil

Written by Veronica_Milvus (768 comments posted) 5th October 2008
The last stanza was a philosophical triumph! Nice one.

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