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Poetry
Delusions of Grandma
By Sir_Nigel
06 October 2008

‘Are we going to the seaside?’ she wondered,

as she chose which brooch to wear

and the care assistant tried to brush her sparse, unruly hair.

‘I used to ride the donkeys – this was long before the war,

with my little brother Walter – he was killed at Singapore.

Then later, me and Arthur spent a week there every year

We’d stay at Mrs Worthington’s on the seafront by the pier

Could you pass my yellow woollen gloves? - my hands are cold as ice.

This lady here’s from Zambia. She’s foreign, but very nice.

Our room would face the promenade – we loved that B&B.

We’d sneak our fish and chips in there, then gaze out at the sea.

Shall we paddle on the seashore? Build castles on the sand?

There I think I’m ready now, would you like to take my hand.

Are we going in a charabanc? Are we stopping on the way?’

So how to tell her gently we won’t be going there today.

Reviews

Written by Veronica_Milvus (768 comments posted) 6th October 2008
ahhh... very sweet! I have to say the title was even better than the poem! Very enjoyable.
Great Title!
Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 6th October 2008
Yes - and I like the way way the first, non-rhyming line, leads into a series of rhyming couplets that end with your brilliantly bathetic / pathetic last line. 
 
I really like this! 
 
Cheers! 
 
John

Written by Brett (1001 comments posted) 6th October 2008
Much to admire here, but (to repeat what has already been said) I did think the title better than the whole. 
And 'Mrs. Worthington' just brought to mind the lyrics of Noel Coward. 
 
Still enjoyable. 
 
Cheers

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3590 comments posted) 6th October 2008
Well I actually preferred the poem, but then what do I know about poetry? It was that bit longer, which was the deciding factor for me. 
I loved this, it was funny, wistful and quite poignant and it rhymes which makes it my sort of poem. 
Always a pleasure 
jane
Jane, what . . .
Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 6th October 2008
. . . do you know about poetry? 
 
I don't know, but you always write really well-considered and insightful reviews of it, especially my efforts, IMHO. 
 
So, I think you know more about poetry than most commentators on GW. 
 
And this is meant as an honest remark to you, not as an insult to anyone else who may see this. 
 
You yourself write exquisitely well in the comedy and 'non -poetry' sections, for which you deserve huge credit! 
 
Never stop! (Sarah - Fleetweood  
Mac?) 
 
Beers! 
 
John XXX
Cheers
Written by Sir_Nigel (40 comments posted) 7th October 2008
Thank you for your comments.  
 
 
Food for thought: Needs a worse title. 
The title drew me in...
Written by wltshr (352 comments posted) 7th October 2008
The poem kept me here. 
 
I normally avoid poetry like the plague and readily admit that I know nothing about it; however I found this gently amusing, charming, and moving. 
 
A Frank Capra poem. 
 
Regards 
 
Wltshr

Written by Phil (6997 comments posted) 7th October 2008
Enjoyed this - great title for an enjoyable poem. A bit more tum-ti-tum than I usually enjoy - but enjoy it I did. 
 
Your stuff never fails to entertain. 
 
Phil

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