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By grace
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07 October 2008 |
A paved flash of urban slick
propelling souls in swaying mass,
diverts aside where Heaven waits,
designer clad
and labelled loud.
Temptation's talons claw to greet,
"see how soft, how glitter rich,"
how shiny is the gleam of greed,
in eyes that seek
to slake desire.
"Touch the dreams of weeping grasp,
luxuriate in sweet excess."
Hades self indulgent rich
denying Penia's
ruling hand.
Courting plastic wealth of least,
unlikely prey are brought to stoop
till urban slick paves hunger's path
and glitter rich
lies empty poor.
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The content
Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 7th October 2008 | ... of this is very relevant to one of the circles of Hell in Dante's works
The poem carries the circular sweep through the structure and the forceful use of language carries the reader with it .
patterjack | Carried away...
Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 7th October 2008 | .. I was -- by the conical shape of the stanzas-- and jumped straight to the descending Circles -- Circle Four in this case I think -- of Dante's work.
I would have referred to Aristophanes , but there is a bitter element in this poem , rather more so than his treatment of Penia in his play.
I see more and more in each reading !
patterjack | Sadly . . .
Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 7th October 2008 | . . . I am lost here, Pam.
Patterjack understands, which is great!
I feel ashamed by my ignorance . . .
I wiish I could understand this, as I hope I do, most of your other work.
Oh dear!
Cheers!
John X | Thank you Patterjack,
Written by grace (173 comments posted) 8th October 2008 | | Hello Patterjack. . .
Written by grace (173 comments posted) 8th October 2008 | I hope I don't disappoint you too much when I say that this is basically a poem about the credit situation but using Dante to help illustrate the point. I'm so pleased that the format works for you and you seem to have enjoyed it, which is most rewarding.
Thank you very much for such a thoughtful and generous review of this one,
my sincere thanks,
Pamx
 | Hello John,
Written by grace (173 comments posted) 8th October 2008 | | admittedly...
Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 8th October 2008 | ... I based a lot of my opinion on your last two stanzas.
I reckon you maybe went a bit deeper there than a reference to the credit situation and onto its consequences -- so at least for me you stimulated a big psychological reaction !
Disappointed ? No way ! The structure itself was worth the read.
patterjack
| Hello John
Written by grace (173 comments posted) 8th October 2008 | I'm sorry to be so obscure.
This is basically a comment on the ability of shops to make us spend money we don't have and the dangers of 'plastic money' only too apparant at the moment; I used Dante's Hades/the rich one and Penia/poverty to help highlight the stuation, (or not).
I hope this helps, I'm so sorry to be so obscure
thank you very much John,
blessings, Pamx |
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