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She Who Must Be Obeyed (for National Poetry Day)
By Veronica_Milvus
07 October 2008
This is about a lady I work with.  The knives are out for her and she doesn't even know it.

SHE WHO MUST BE OBEYED

 

She bestrides the petty world like a transvestite;

broad shouldered, well made-up, in pinstripe suit,

and we, her project team, can’t get a thing right;

she regards us as the dirt upon her boot.

 

She asks us what we think - and then reminds us,

just so there’s no mistaking of our plan.

Corrects our every word and undermines us

and kicks us when we’re down, because she can.

 

For twenty-one long years I’ve lived this business

I used to make decisions on my own.

I wonder how we got ourselves in this mess

and let this gorgon turn us into stone.

 

If I’d a little doll made out of wax I’d

be sure to stick it full of hateful pins

I’d shove the biggest one into its backside

and twist it with a deeply evil grin.

The mills of God grind slowly, so said Shakespeare
but when they do, they grind exceeding small.
I've found that bullies always meet their fates here,
so she'll get her own come-uppance after all.

Reviews
Briiliant!
Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 7th October 2008
Just seen this as it popped up . . .  
 
I shall give this a more considered review in due course . . . 
 
First reaction? Love it! 
 
Cheers! 
 
John X
I enjoyed the wit
Written by fellpony (1749 comments posted) 7th October 2008
especially  
I’d stick the biggest one into its backside 
and twist it with a deeply evil grin.
 
 
I'm leaving my workplace in the next few months (something about not enough students ... ) so my reaction to such workplace clashes is less acute than it would otherwise be. There are one or two I'd quite like to prod with something sharp. PS leaving is a great time to take the gloves off and say things that, perhaps, a wiser and more permanent employee would not utter.
Alas
Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 7th October 2008
... this is the opposite view of the Exec. that I put forth in my eponymous poem .  
 
There is a very clever bitterness expressed here -- too bitter to be really funny , especially when one considers that if and when she goes , she may take with her a considerable amount of redundancy payment or the like.  
 
My experience of the like was not the result of working for female bosses , but for a religious male . 
 
I enjoyed the work . 
 
patterjack

Written by Brett (1001 comments posted) 7th October 2008
A skillful belend of lightness and acerbity. 
Loved the final line of the first stanza, and can't help but admire such cheeky rhymes - elegant! 
And what a final kiss off - lovely! Hope the bitch gets it! 
Enjoyed. 
 
Cheers

Written by Josie (2847 comments posted) 7th October 2008
Hello Veronica. Excellent. How we all hate people such as you describe. When I said that this side of the website had gone quiet, I made a mistake. I didn't notice that my words had gone on the poetry side. It was meant for "children." But I think your poem on the subject of a work colleague is excellent with good metre also. Excellent and I particularly liked the first two lines. ha ha Sometimes people like this are really mixed up inside and not confident at all - quite different to the person they try to portray to the outside world. Feel sorry for her.

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3590 comments posted) 8th October 2008
I like the way you kept the venom in check and managed to express it in such a well structured form. I, too, like the sparky rhymes. 
She does sound like a nasty bit of work but then with you as an enemy I almost feel sorry for her. 
:) :)  
 
jane
RUMP!
Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 8th October 2008
Now had space to read this several times - really like it! 
 
And, of course, your fourth stanza is RUMP (right up my passage, as it were). 
 
I just wonder if any of your colleagues ever venture onto GW to admire your work? 
 
What a rumpus would ensue! 
 
Yo! Ho! 
 
Cheers! 
 
John

Written by Veronica_Milvus (768 comments posted) 8th October 2008
Thanks all. I did enjoy writing this. 
 
Fellpony, I hope yu have your next challenge lined up, or are you going to write full time now? Good luck! 
 
BBS thank you especailly for your extremely backhanded compliment, if that's what it was! 
 
Tolstoy, that's why I have a nom de plume... no I am not really called Veronica... and nobody or almost nobody at work knows I write at all. SWMBO least of all. 
 
Believe it or not, I wrote "wax I'd" and had no idea what I was going to rhyme it with. I was thinking: 
 
"backslide" 
"look on the black side" 
and then suddenly it came to me. My subconscious must have got there before me.
SWMBO
Written by Katanga (1537 comments posted) 8th October 2008
Good for your subconscious! Hoorah! 
 
'wax I'd' and 'backside' would take some beating as a rhyme! My poor 'grub'll' with 'rubble' doesn't pass muster! 
 
BTW, is SWMBO a BMBO? 
 
Ha ha! 
 
Cheers! 
 
John X

Written by Phil (6997 comments posted) 9th October 2008
Enjoyed this, Veronica. Humour was there, but layered over with a rich layer of (almost) hatred. Work can be bad enough without the likes of her. 
 
Enjoy the pin twisting. 
 
Phil

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