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Poetry
Growing up
By sarahh
08 October 2008
Your inocense is goes away when you learn from right and wrong.
The easy way of life goes down with your building blocks of life,
all with a letters of the alphabet on them; A to Z.
Your new learning ability comes with hair and a sense of overwhelming confusion.
When puberty strikes it strikes hard and impetuous.
With this new power you feel as if you could rule the world, or the world ruin you.
Parental problems, school problems, friend problems, and they are all out to get you.
But do not fret for with every bad situation comes a lesson and those are your new
building blocks of life.
Everyday rearranging them to the person who you would most like to be. 


 

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Written by Northern-nana (47 comments posted) 8th October 2008
I do like the way this is going. You recognise that puberty puts you through the wringer but you offer light at the end of the tunnel. Life can sometimes be crap (at any age) but valuable lessons can be learned and make you stronger. You sound like you're doing OK. I don't always find your work easy to understand but as you are a teenager, I think this is par for the course but I did like this one. 
 
I don't feel equipped to advise technically, so perhaps other members with some knowledge could help. I wasn't sure what you meant by your first line and had to re-read it, but it flowed better after that. I assume you meant 'strikes' and not 'shrikes' - the latter being small birds that impale it's prey on thorns. Unless you did mean shrike and there is some hidden message in there somewhere that I'm missing ........ 
 
Best wishes. 
 
Nana  
 
:)

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