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Poetry
Eternity
By chocomallow
28 January 2006
Eternity

When I look into your eyes
I see a sense of serenity
When I touch your smooth skin
I feel a fragment of your personality
When I listen to your voice
I hear a sound of tranquillity
When I smell your fragrant scent
I sniff a mist of opportunity
When I hold your supportive hand
I hope we will be for eternity


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Written by amboline (183 comments posted) 1st February 2006
This is very nice but it strikes me as being an essentially private poem. As a third party who has no idea who the piece is written for, I find myself unable to relate to what kind of personality is revealed in the touch of skin in lines 3-4. Having said that, I'm sure that the poem is full of meaning for the lucky person for whom you wrote it :)

Written by neh205 (23 comments posted) 16th February 2006
:)  
 
I absolutely love this poem! 
 
It is very moving and romantic. 
 
It makes excellent use of the senses and manages to give so much detail and emotion in such a short space.  
 
also the structure 'flows' perfectly. 
 
I really enjoyed reading this poem

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