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By chocomallow
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28 January 2006 |
Eternity
When I look into your eyes I see a sense of serenity When I touch your smooth skin I feel a fragment of your personality When I listen to your voice I hear a sound of tranquillity When I smell your fragrant scent I sniff a mist of opportunity When I hold your supportive hand I hope we will be for eternity
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Written by amboline (183 comments posted) 1st February 2006 | This is very nice but it strikes me as being an essentially private poem. As a third party who has no idea who the piece is written for, I find myself unable to relate to what kind of personality is revealed in the touch of skin in lines 3-4. Having said that, I'm sure that the poem is full of meaning for the lucky person for whom you wrote it | Written by neh205 (23 comments posted) 16th February 2006 | I absolutely love this poem! It is very moving and romantic. It makes excellent use of the senses and manages to give so much detail and emotion in such a short space. also the structure 'flows' perfectly. I really enjoyed reading this poem |
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