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By Lizzy
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25 November 2008 |
My writing class was given the task of writing a monologue from a man's point of view (we're all women in the class), he is defending his infidelity. Word limit 250 words.
We then had to write the woman's response, once again a monologue 250 words.
Man
Why did she have to come back at that moment? She said she wouldn’t be back ‘til late, I thought I’d got all the time in the world!
I’ll never forget the look on her face. Horror and revulsion even a touch of pity.
She wouldn’t give me chance to explain, took one look, slammed the door and left. I’m sure she’d never suspected before, it didn’t interfere with our life, in any way. Sex was, still is good. I never forget birthdays, anniversaries, I still bring her the odd unexpected gift and I even put up with her mother.
And I do love her.
I can see that she was shocked, how many women would expect to see that when they open their bedroom door. I could promise that it would never happen again, even say that it was the first time. The problem with that is she could find evidence to the contrary if she cared to look.
I suppose in a way it’s partly her fault but I’m sure she wouldn’t see it that way. Women can be so unforgiving.
As soon as she left this morning I’d got everything ready. Closed the curtains just in case, you never know when the window cleaner might turn up. When I heard the front door open and footsteps coming up the stairs I just froze.
It really should not have been her new Agent Provocateur underwear that I was (nearly) wearing; I just couldn’t resist it.
I think she could, eventually, have accepted almost anything but that.
Monologue 2 (Her point of view)
Why did I go back? They say that ignorance is bliss, I could still have been blissful in my ignorance.
If I care to think about it there were signs. He enjoyed shopping with me for clothes, would choose things and persuade me to buy them. When I said I was going on a diet he said he loved me the way I was, I was flattered. I see now that this would not have suited his purposes. Friends were quite envious declaring that their husbands had to be dragged screaming to department stores and when there were of little use.
I loved him for the freedom he gave me, encouraging me to go out with the girls, even not minding when we went on girly weekends. He’d say he had books to read, programmes he wanted to watch. What he really wanted was space and time to pander to his perversion.
Do I still love him? I’m not sure. He’s not the man I thought he was. Is he a man?
Can I live with him knowing he has this dark secret? What if our friends knew, or maybe they do!
Can I forgive him?
Every time I close my eyes I see him there staring at me, a look of horror on his face. And he’s wearing……..I’m not sure I can even say it to myself. He’s wearing…..my new designer underwear…..
the ones he bought me for our anniversary.
I think that was a step too far.
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well done
Written by pebble (83 comments posted) 25th November 2008 | it showed the 2 sides well as was sort of amusing in a sad way. i like the woman's last line.
only thing i'd say is that the woman would be more likely to name the underwear brand than the man (they don't notice these things). | or do they?
Written by kevinrobson73 (756 comments posted) 25th November 2008 | following on from pebble's crit
i think you showed a lot of flair la perla style
i didn't find it too berlei
it was a triumph
i think you should have a double cup
underwired
like a wonderbra |
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (5054 comments posted) 25th November 2008 | I thought this worked very successfully, especially given the limited word count. You managed to pack a lot of character exposition into the two monologues. Oddly though I thought the man's one was better. His reactions seem in keeping and plausible; the womans' was OK but I would have expected a more confused state, questioning her own sexuality maybe.
Great effort,
jane |
Written by Fledermaus (4146 comments posted) 25th November 2008 | | So... Is she upset because he was wearing ladies' underwear, or because it was HER underwear? In a way it's funny that people should make such a fuss over clothes. If he would secretly dress up in a gorilla suit would they both be as bothered? Hm... Maybe they would... |
Written by Phil (8698 comments posted) 25th November 2008 | Enjoyed these - particularly the initial ambiguity of the first. While I have to deny ever cross dressing - well I would, wouldn't I? - the man's response seemed the more rounded of the two.
Good stuff.
Phil |
Written by Brett (2419 comments posted) 25th November 2008 | Enjoyed very much, and agree with most of what has already been said - the man's was the stronger. Very intriguing read - just off to close the curtains!
Cheers |
Written by Lizzy (966 comments posted) 26th November 2008 | Thanks for reviews. Yes I think you're right about the woman's response.
Clever Kevin!!
Pebble, I thought that because he was 'in' to ladies undies he might know the name of something exclusive.
Jane, I think you're right she would probably have questioned herself.
Fledermaus, strangely we had a similar debate at my writing class, women dress in men's clothes all the time and no one objects. One ex solicitor member said such a thing had caused a divorce, the woman had been horrified when she found out. But you are right it shouldn't matter what we wear.
Thanks Phil
Hope you've got the curtains tightly shut Brett
Thanks all
Lizzy | Hi Lizzy
Written by jean.day (2894 comments posted) 26th November 2008 | I really enjoyed this and thought you brought it over very well. I was puzzled about the cross dressing for awhile. I thought maybe he was gay and had another man with him, and he was playing the part of the woman.
I think if I saw my husband wearing women's underwear my reaction would be laughter. How could anyone choose to be uncomfortable when men have much easier and more comfortable clothes.
And don't we women who wear trousers, pretty much all the time, get the best of both worlds?
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