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Mithras Morning
By patterjack
11 February 2006
After a bushfire , near our seaside holdiday home

MITHRAS MORNING

Through smoke of sacrificial fires along the hills
the sun last evening sank like a clot of blood
from the throat of the new slain bull.
Eyes reddened by the smoke , I sought the constellations
but the cloak of night showed no emblazoned stars.

The smell of burning hung throughout the night
sickly sweet and acrid,
but with the morning light , the god , new born
rises with gold vermilion glory in the east
and spreads a benediction wide across the bay
until the water, mirror-still beneath the faint blue haze,
all that remains of last night’s immolation,
stretches pink from point across to headland point.

The moored yachts rest with their attendant gulls,
reflection of boat and bird transmuted by the god
to show the dawning of a world renewed

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Mithras Morning
Written by Pythagoras (11 comments posted) 11th February 2006
Lovely visual description, it comes together like a painting.

Written by Fledermaus (3160 comments posted) 19th May 2007
Ah, how nice, a clear image of a lost religion. Somehow this poem gives me a clear idea of why it was so popular amongst the legions. 
And that put into a rather modern experience... Very nice.
thanks
Written by patterjack (1095 comments posted) 19th May 2007
Comments much appreciated -- out of a kind of catastrophe there did come some beauty 
 
patterjack

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