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At The Cross
By Pythagoras
15 February 2006

 


 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

As I look up and see Him

I am falling apart,

My tears fall like hail stones

He's holding my heart.

 

 

Bring Him down from the cross

Please find some other way,

Oh please save our Son,

What's He done anyway?

 

 

He was always so easy

Other children would cry,

He was so good all the time

Father, why must He die?

 

 

He's fading, oh Father,

I can't watch Him, our Son,

Oh why do you let it happen?

You said He was the One.

 

 

You said He was the Messiah,

Now you've let them kill

The only one who could have saved us.

How can this be your will?

 

 

Oh please bring Him down Father

His death must be near

It's nearly the end

Oh He cries, can you hear?

 

 

Is this all for us sinners

How could it be,

That you'd let our Son die

To save sinners like me?

 

 

Are we worth it, oh God?

These Romans don't care

They cast lots for His clothes

That they'll never wear.

 

 

And all those to come

Will they be concerned

That our Son gave his life

So they can have what they haven't earned?

 

 

Oh God, don't let it happen

Bring Him back down to me,

Let me have Him, my Son,

I love Him, you see.

 

 

I'll take Him away,

Give us a new start,

Oh God, please let me have Him,

You're breaking my Heart.

 

 

Oh God, I'm so selfish

I know He must die

He said it was written,

Now I know why.

 

 

Oh it's all over now

I can't see Him breathing,

Oh, they're piercing his side

My Heart has stopped beating.

 

 

As they bring down his body

I fall to my knees

With His head in my arms

I cry out to you, please

 

 

Don't let this be a waste

Let everyone see

What our Son has given

So they can be free.

Reviews
Amazing...
Written by B.D. (82 comments posted) 27th February 2006
Wow. This is an awesome poem and there's nothing bad to say about it...
Well...
Written by shadowplay (41 comments posted) 2nd March 2006
I'm an atheist, so maybe I miss the point of this... the lines seem to short, the stanzas seem to be forced to rhyme and it's such a well trodden subject I felt like I knew how it was going to end, and I was right. I'm sorry, but I don't feel you're offering me anything here.
Awesome..
Written by piperlawrence (16 comments posted) 1st April 2006
I'm a Catholic, and knowing the story behind the poem, you can truly see a new persepctive. A lot of people don't think, when they hear the bible story, about the personal note, that although it was predestined that it would hppen, Jesus had a family who loved him and cared and people don't really tend to think about that sort of stuff becuase it was a few thousand years ago. It's a really good poem also to read, because of it's good ryhme and rythm, however, I'm not a poet myself so I'm not an expert.

Written by clockwork (17 comments posted) 7th March 2007
That gave me goosebumps. Reads well and the personal perspective makes me consider again how much He did for me. Thankyou!
Meh...
Written by proveyouexist (6 comments posted) 17th May 2007
In my opinion it is almost too structured which, to me at least, leads to boredome. I do feel that any religious person would enjoy this poem for the simple fact that it is religious, not for the actual poem itself. It does seem that you were trying to hard to abide to your rhyming scheme.
Yes I liked it...
Written by goingtothedogs (58 comments posted) 22nd May 2007
Yes I'm an aetheist, but I have no problem with the idea that Jesus was a good man who had a point to make. 
 
I like the telling of the poem from his mother's point of view. Jeses was not in fact always particularly good to his mother (e.g. running off as a teenager to show off in the temple), but her feelings come through. 
 
And I don't agree with the previous point of "trying too hard to abide to your rhyming scheme". I like good rhyme and meter. although it makes a piece much more challenging to construct, the constraint, in itself, forces you to think carefully about what you are trying to say.

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