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By spiderbaby49
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04 April 2005 |
Another look into one of life's harsh situations. Runaway Into an alley, a young boy stumbles. It's occupied. His courage crumbles. Gap tooth jeers. Beer breath fumbles. "Lookin' fer a place ta sleep?" He mumbles.
"Runner are ya?" The drunkard whines. "We can always spot the signs. This alley 'ere is Fred's and mines It's where we sleeps an' drinks an' dines.
That's Fred right there.The scrag beard junkie Eatin' drugs to feed 'is monkey. Treats me like a flippin' flunkey. See 'is eyes, all red and gunkey."
Fire licks in metal bin. The warmth entices young boy in. "I'm Stan," the man says, proffering gin, "tell us your tale. Go on, begin."
The boy is wary but joins the pair. They have a smoke and food to share. Some comfort in his black despair. The junkie smiles a vacant stare.
"You got a sleepin' bag young man? Spread it out by Uncle Stan. You wants ter keep warm if ya can. Now, come on tell us why ya ran."
Fortified a bit with tea he tells them why he had to flee. "Mum wouldn't listen, wouldn't see when I told her Dads abusing me.
Dad shouted and told her that I lied. He beat me up. I nearly died. I stayed for her sake. Really tried but couldn't stop the fear inside.
So I ran and now I'm on the street in rain and wind and snow and sleet. with stinking clothes and rotten feet.
When I was little my life was sweet."
"B*****d should be shot," they said "we'd pound him till our fingers bled. You stick with us son, Stan and Fred. We'll see ya right. Make sure you's fed.
Yer story's made us want ter weep. We're sorry you've been 'urt so deep. We'll be yer fam'ly nowso sleep. an pray the Lord yer soul ter keep." |
Fred & Stan Written by Songster (52 comments posted) 4th April 2005 | Spidey, This boy was lucky he didn't find worse than his horrible Dad in Fred & Stan. It's a good poem but I think you could tighten it up a bit. Some of the lines are more than flexible. Can you help me please? I'm having a bit of trouble finding my way around. Where do I go to to reply to people who've reviewed my work? Where do I go to to talk to someone who's online? | Written by spiderbaby49 (137 comments posted) 6th April 2005 | Are getting familiarised with the site now Songster? Thanks for your comments on the poem. I wrote it quite a while ago and since then I have tried to tighten up my style a bit. Think I will probably tackle a bit of a re write on this one. spidey
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