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Empty Nest Syndrome
By linni54
17 February 2009


Life will never be the same again, the child is no longer .....


Why do I feel so empty

Why do I feel so blue

It’s the empty nest syndrome

It’s true


Those childhood years, I do so wish

I could go through them all again, I do so miss


Trips enjoyed , outings of fun

These years now all done


So many activities crammed into the day

Why, oh why, did I wish them all away

I would do them all over again -

sit through a gala watching you swim in the fast lane


Suddenly you’re 18 and off to Uni

Mum in state of shock, thinking how can it be?


Becoming your own person and going your own way

I never thought we would reach that day

For when you’re young, we think it will forever last

But it’s no time at all and the years have passed


Life has changed , but must go on

Great for son but not for mum

Knowing what your Nan went through

how she must have felt, just as I now do


What role do I have to play, now you are grown

and the nest your have almost flown


A friend told me that as soon as you have children,

you have to know that one day you have to let them go…..


Why do I feel so empty

Why do I feel so blue

It’s the empty nest syndrome

It’s true

Reviews

Written by Brett (2419 comments posted) 17th February 2009
Welocome to GW, linni 54. I have read your two recent posts, and while it is evident you have emotions you wish to display, as poetry they do read awkwardly. We are all novices here, but you have chosen to rhyme yet follow now rhythm or set metre, structure, it all seems a bit haphazard. For instance your 'A friend told me...' there you abandon rhyme altogether, where before you were trying.  
I apologise if this seems harsh for a first post, but I do recommend you should look into poetic form if that is the way you wish to express yourself. 
 
Cheers
Doh!
Written by Brett (2419 comments posted) 17th February 2009
That was meant to read 'no rhythm', not 'now' ! 
 
Upon reading this again, I would suggest, as earlier, studying metre and form if you wish to write rhymed verse, or try writing free verse with attention to language and imagery and such. 
 
All the best 
 

Written by linni54 (12 comments posted) 17th February 2009
Thank you Brett. I am very much a novice and have a lot to read and learn - looking forward to it! 
 
Kind regards 
 
Linda

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