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By brook_rivers
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20 February 2006 |
Colours reflected in the rain, The sun has come out again, The rainbow is arched high in the sky,
Red like roses and love, Yellow like sand and happiness, Green like grass and envy, Blue like the sea and depression Indigo like passion and wealth Violet like flowers and hope Golden like life.
Birds soar through the magnitude of colour While the sun makes everything visible So the raindrops can be seen delicately painting the world. |
Written by B.D. (82 comments posted) 31st May 2006 | | It's good! The last line is kinda longer than the others so maybe if you broke it up like: "So the raindrops can be seen/delicately painting the world."?? | Written by Laura (10 comments posted) 15th September 2006 | I agree with B.D. I thought this was a wonderful piece, you've turned something already beautiful into a work of art. lol, well done. Just a suggestion though; this might make it flow better "Colours reflected in the rain/ The sun has come out yet again" Up to you, again, well done. |
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