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By brook_rivers
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20 February 2006 |
I see no beauty, only pain,
I see no sunshine, only rain,
I see no happiness, only tears,
I see no way out beyond the years,
I want to see beauty without pain,
I want to see sunshine without rain,
I want to see happiness without tears,
I want to live beyond the years. |
Written by Vanderlay ( comments posted) 25th February 2006 | Don't we all
I like the contrast of the repetition in the first tree words in the first stanza thats in conlict of the last; 'I see', 'I want. |
Written by B.D. (82 comments posted) 27th February 2006 | | You have such amazing talent that there's no constructive criticism I can give you but to say that the poem is really awesome. |
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