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Poetry
Bass
By supasayer
05 April 2005
As i sit here now perusing this sight and contemplating adding one of my own pieces, i wonder which one, and the answer is found in the instrument sat next to this keyboard i fondle....i wrote this 6-8 months ago...picked my bass guitar up and strummed once since...woe is me...hope you enjoy. supasprayer

Bass

 

Shiny tool of low-tone tune potential,

Sat on your guitar stand throne

You create an exponential

Growth in my personal street credential.

 

For those who witness your reputation

Raising prescence,

A present

From my wife,

The praise rains providential.

 

The fact I haven't touched it for a number of months now

Is nonessential in achieving this status differential

And to most quite inconsequential.

Bass for your face,

Bass for guitar case,

Bass for my place;

 

But if only,

If only

Fingers could race

Up and down the strings with torrid grace,

Slap bass at cane-lick pace,

Create rhythm like torrential

Downpour splattering on tin roofs in May,

If only

If only

If only I could play.

 

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Written by Blade (14 comments posted) 5th April 2005
Two words: love and longing. That's what I think about reading this poem. For the guitar and its sound of course. And to the wife maybe, in metaphore.

Written by supasayer (1 comments posted) 5th April 2005
thanks blade for your time and interpretation.....i didn't intend any metapohor regarding my missus, but i see poetry as a fluid form, which like any collection of words will read differently to different people...a lot of my work is heartfelt and emotive in its origin...however, i also take pleasure from the rhyming and assonance of a piece...this is one such work...thanks again... 
 
peace 
 
supascibla 

Written by Betsie (30 comments posted) 15th April 2005
Loved it.

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