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Fasten Your Seatbelts Please
By brook_rivers
27 February 2006
This is another sketch from the first episode. Involving a very sweet, but dippy character. This sketch built up on the confusion of misunderstandings.
Have a few more characters to introduce from the series so keep a llok out!


 [smart looking woman wandering around airport shopping area with a clipboard]
 

Woman: Hi do you know where the departure lounge is? [looks very flustered and in a rush]
 

Michelle: Oh! Is that that new shop that’s opening up? [over-the-top friendly but very dippy]
 

Woman: Excuse me?
 

Michelle: It sells furniture doesn’t it?
 

Woman: No sorry…  I’m going on holiday!
 

Michelle: Oh really, that’s nice, when are you off?
 

Woman: What?
 

Michelle: When are you off on holiday?
 

Woman: well now
 

Michelle: [looks concerned] you had better hurry up! Its half an hour to the air port. Dear me you left your shopping late!!
 

Woman:  But this is the airport!
 

Michelle: Really? I was sure I drove to the mall must have taken a wrong turn. Oh well that explains it, I thought there was a two for one on suitcases or something!
 

Woman:  [looking very confused] but don’t you work here, I mean u’ve got the uniform, the clipboard……..
 

Michelle: Oh no this is just my shopping list, and as for the outfit I brought that at the mall.

Reviews
Oh My God!
Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 27th February 2006
Brook/King Lovely Girl and Boy, 
I cannot believe you have learnt NOTHING from your past experiences!!! Funny!? This wouldn't get a grin from the Laughing Policeman. 
 
Listen, I'm not giving up on you. I'll post something myself in the next day or so. It's for you two. Have a look and ask yourselves why it is people find things funny. 
 
Don't give up. What planet you on? Don't panic. Text the coordinates and I'll have a rescue ship up before you can say Peter Kaye. 
 
Slainte!
!!
Written by brook_rivers (486 comments posted) 27th February 2006
Come on, you've got to admit the idea's there.. it just hasn't got a great punchline at the end thats all!!! 
not even slightly funny?!  
Well im sure you will come to its rescue as you did with Tanya. 
 
I will type up a whole episode when I have time as it does all gel and relate to each other, maybe thats the prob.......... 
 
:p
AAAAaaarrrgghhhhhhhh!
Written by givitsum (651 comments posted) 27th February 2006
Bang - bang - bang - bang... 
 
(Thats just my head on the table) 
 
Another free-for-all. Watch the hits & reviews counter, we'll probably melt the bastard. 
 
Who won the horse shit sandwich, by the way?
the winner is..........
Written by brook_rivers (486 comments posted) 28th February 2006
oh you won it most definately, by miles!!!!
ok
Written by bright-eyes (6 comments posted) 28th February 2006
I can see where this is going, and it has potential. But its just lacking somehow. It reminds me of a character form the catherine tate show, which i suppose is the style that this is meant to be similar to?  
i like the idea of a comedy set in an airport, i am actually quite fascinated by this 'series' and the discussion its caused. If anything you've provoked interest which is the main aim of most writers so thats something to be congratualted upon. 
I suggest that you work on the series, dont be too hasty to put posts straight onto the site until they are exactly how you want them. Dont be discouraged though personally I think this is a great start.

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