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In Your Absence
By blackrainbow
28 February 2006
Written for my girlfriend.

Colours forget their radiance,
fading into shades of black and grey
as dismal apparitions of things they used to be
in your absence.

Perfect darkness overcomes the light
that shone to guide my way;
the candle snuffed, I stumble blindly against the dark.
A brighter day slips away from me
in your absence.

My footsteps falter,
unsure where I'm going, where I've been;
uncertain whether deadly shadows growl around the next corner
in this labyrinth.  I'm
falling away from myself
in your absence.

Stillness falls to rust and ruin;
nothing spoken, nothing heard.
Without the warm tones of your voice
to stave the frosted silence,
the cold wraps itself around my heart
in your absence.

Reviews
great!
Written by neh205 (23 comments posted) 28th February 2006
I really like this poem, cant fault it in anyway! It reads so naturally, very emotional. 
 
Wow! this really does show me the compition thats out there! 
 

Written by amboline (183 comments posted) 1st March 2006
Mmmm. Very moving. I hope your other half appreciated it :)  
 
I wonder if "In Your Absence" mightn't have made a stronger title than "I Miss You"?

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