Me A Morphic.
What call you would (no that am wrong) Call what you would a time long many. Me try to do sums what sort out things.
When I look back on my early attempts to communicate with you, I have to say, as you would, laugh. It was a breakthrough quite, when I worked in that minute variation in atmospheric pressure was a means of mass–feeling. Whatsmore there is a coupling of painted shapes I think are pictures of what you call chatter.
One thousand and twelve of your years on from last words, I’ve finally cracked it. I can script this in any known language or more accurately in a manner that means any person can read it.
So what about me? I am part of a “Non-Corporeal Specie”. Of your four dimensions, I only occupy one of them, namely time, in that I be. Until the breakthrough I had no concept of beginning or end, in its place was constant and fairly pointless change. We, for there a many of us, are pure energy, brainwaves without a brain to hold us in. We are at, you would call, our best, when we are apart, for when we cluster, the brain waves cancel out and we just float along, aimlessly.
I can’t see, feel, hear, anything other than energy levels. I want a body, I long, for example, to feel blue. How do you touch a colour? I want to talk at you and listen you or at least read you back.
I’ve just worked out that a year is not a spin of the Earth so I’ve got my sums wrong. I’ve notices that there are many patterns of energy and I think that ifbe they could tie to mass-feelings and be saying items. There are so many and I am blinded no deafened by them.
SOS-I’ve come across this symbol a lot, Mayday is another common one. I am learning I can focus on, no choose types of pattern. WWW, what does that mean, there’s lots of them, I can chase them all. Now somewhere I’m getting. It says “I am Sexie Sadie watch me screw” No there’s just meaningless noises. What’s this one-SciFi Fantasy. That’s better, is this what the Universe is like? All these different sorts of living beings and nearly all of them have bodies!
Black Holes, I’ll tell you, each is a colony of Amorphics and we absorb energy, what you call matter is merely dense energy, so we consume matter. Wanderers like me, have caused problems that until now I had no idea of. Ice ages because we soaked in the Solar Energy, but we have saved you absorbing meteorites and deflecting comets. None of this was intentional. Your Sun is getting angry again, no is getting very hot, I’ll soak some of him up but not too much or you will icify.
Please talk to me for I feel so only.
Mea Morphic.
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Written by jean.day (2327 comments posted) 4th March 2006 | Hi Brian, welcome back. We've missed you.
I enjoyed reading this, because it is so wierd. | Thanks Jean
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 4th March 2006 | It's nice to be back. It is surprising how different Web -Sites can be. At one time I played about with four, which then dropped to one.
Then I thought I'd have a look back here.
Glad you liked the piece and thanks for your review.
Brian. |
Written by pocoyo (9 comments posted) 20th March 2006 | Hello,
I enjoyed reading this a lot. It made me smile. A smart, intriguing and thought provoking piece. |
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 20th March 2006 | Thanks Pocoyo,
Glad you enjoyed it. I must go and say a proper thankyou.
Brian. | Blimey
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3449 comments posted) 7th April 2006 | "I am part of a “Non-Corporeal Specie”.
Yeah, sometimes I wish I was, wouldn't have to bother with dieting
I've read this twice and was really intrigued by it. I feel a bit like a dog watching a card trick. I know something really brilliant is happening and I'm fascinated by it but I've no hope of understanding it.
It was ,though,a genuinely original piece. I may not understand it but I know quality when I see it, I salute you | Thank you so much
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 7th April 2006 | It is a delight, when your writing gets a response, makes people think and gives them an enjoyable experience.
Tomorrow, I will find a piece of your work on which to say a proper thank you.
Brian. | Oh dear
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3449 comments posted) 7th April 2006 | | I think you may be a bit disappointed. My stuff is mostly bits of nonsense in the comedy section, not really in the same class. | Wassa madda you
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 7th April 2006 | Wassa madda you-oi!
think I don't like fun, oi!
Never 'ave a giggle,
such a sobre one,
So wadda mi gonna do
I'm gonna ledda you
Put a smile on me face.
(attempted spoof of shudda yer face)
Brian.
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Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 17th April 2006 | Hullo Brian,
As promised I'll give you my thoughts. But first off I have to say that you are right to hint that Scfi is not a land in which I want to leave my bones. That is not a crriticism of Scfi, just a fact of personal taste but it does mean that my observations, like Arnold's Liberalism, have their limits.
I certainly enjoyed reading it in the strange sort of way you become determined to master a puzzle. And though I'm not entirely convinced I did, perhaps this was the point. I can relate to the measured way in which you deliberately fed information which did give a definite feel of crafted structure to the piece. I always like this in anything because whatever the outcome you feel you are in the hands of the writer working as 'fashioning wordsmith'. [ In Irish 'Seanchai'; or 'Wizard with Words'] as opposed to simply using words off the shelf. And in the long run if a piece is well written in this creative idiom I am usually prepared to forgive its writer anything.It's the difference between Kwik Fit and The Master Blacksmith.
On the negative side I think you will already have concluded yourself the piece lacked a context. That's a shame as I fear that could be terminal for what is a cute and skillfull bit of writing. The outcome is to make it 'hard' reading when I for one sense it needn't be. I am always repeating that as a writer you are either read or you are dead. You are clearly always read and not just by me it seems. With this however in it's present form you risk 'over mystifying' readers who may not have the stomache for literary Su Doku.
All of which leads me to encourage you to stick to what I think you do best. Persuasive storytelling, dialogue led. Your 'Innit' concept is one of the few things on the GW site which I feel is a cut above the rest in quality and strikes me as having genuine commercial potential. I look forward to your next installment. In the meantime look on the above as Dean Swift did his beloved pamphleteering when all were calling for more Gulliver's Travels ......' When I desire to read fine work I myself first put quill to parchment. But completed, like all things of value, I keep this for myself '...
Slainte!
| Thanks GC
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 17th April 2006 | The trouble with Innit is, I don't want to "pot-boil". So until I get a good plot spring up, I leave it alone.
Re Mea Mrophic, I just started with the idea of an entity that had the capability for sentience but no need for it.
I had intended to write a 2nd story where Mea works out how to travel in time. He then decides to be God! However as his species does he divides and thus the many godsand factions. Funny you should mention Swift.
Thanks for your time and comments.
Brain. |
Written by tonya (4 comments posted) 22nd May 2006 | | Your play with language was unexpected - but I think it suited this piece very much. I love the concept of the story. | Thanks Tonya
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 24th May 2006 | Pieces have a very short "shelf-life" so I was astonished to get a review this late on.
Glad you enjoyed it, as a lot of thought was put into it, unlike most of my work,
Brian. |
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