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Poetry
Cone
By patterjack
06 March 2006
The amniotic waters of the bay
lap past the yachts , the cruisers at their moorings,
and past my body , floating in the ripples.
High above , a jet invades the north and leaves behind its long white plume
to cleave the sky , with a silver arrowhead glinting in the sun.
It disappears into the cloud , and now I watch
the lovely long slow wheelings of three pelicans winding the world from left to right.
Counter clockwise beneath , a solitary eagle scans the waves for prey ,
and a few unquiet gulls , resenting my passage past their roosts , flap up and around the boats.
Only the cormorants are still , projecting their serpent necks , cautiously eyeing my passing.

Here in the water I am as light as all those uplifted birds , freed of earth’s weight.

I lie at the lowest point of the inverted cone of sight,
focus of the vastness of the sky that funnels
down to my
solitary
self
I draw it to me to spiral outwards to an end I can’t conceive

I am too small to hold it to myself.

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Written by Bagheera (680 comments posted) 6th March 2006
:) and I really wish I could pen verse which flows so easily! 8)  
 
Don't know how much value there is in comments from someone without a shred of poetic skill, but I liked it. The birds flew off the page and came alive in front of me, and the sense of lying at the narrow end of a funnel of vision looking at a vast open sky is a feeling I recognise - I imagine we've all done this at one time or another. Thanks for reminding me! :grin

Written by amboline (183 comments posted) 7th March 2006
Very sophisticated indeed... and it looks beautiful on screen. So you can write superb free verse as well as well-crafted stuff in the classic poetic forms! Erm... not sure what else to add here really. Very well done indeed!

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